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    With first light, I hear my old neighbour

    I am wondering if my sentence sound natural.

    With first light, I hear my old neighbour climbing out of his creaky bed. After I while, he shuffles about his flat for a long time, the taps of his walking stick hitting the parquet with metronomic regularity.

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    Re: With first light, I hear my old neighbour

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    I am wondering if my sentence sounds natural.

    With At first light, I hear my old neighbour climbing out of his creaky bed. After a while, he shuffles about his flat for a long time, the taps of his walking stick hitting tapping the parquet floor with metronomic regularity.
    The taps don't hit the floor, do they?

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    Re: With first light, I hear my old neighbour

    Note that "with first light" is not wrong, and it might well work in a given context; it's just that "at first light" is more common.

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    Re: With first light, I hear my old neighbour

    teechar,

    I used "taps" because I found this definition in the Longman Dictionary: "an act of hitting something lightly. "There was a tap at the door." And I (wrongly) believed I could use "tap" in combination with a "walking stick". But apparently, that is wrong.

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    Re: With first light, I hear my old neighbour

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    And I ... believed I could use "tap" in combination with "walking stick". But apparently, that is wrong.
    No, of course you can do that!
    You just didn't use it correctly in that sentence.

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    the taps of his walking stick hitting the parquet.
    Can you see why it doesn't work? It should be the stick (not the taps of the stick) that's hitting the floor.
    tap = sound

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    Re: With first light, I hear my old neighbour

    You could use the phrase in a different sentence: Everyone could hear ​the taps of his walking stick hitting the parquet floor.
    I am not a teacher.

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    Re: With first light, I hear my old neighbour

    Quote Originally Posted by GoesStation View Post
    You could use the phrase in a different sentence: Everyone could hear ​the taps of his walking stick hitting the parquet floor.
    Just to clarify: Even in that sentence, it's the stick (not the taps) hitting the floor.

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    Re: With first light, I hear my old neighbour

    Quote Originally Posted by teechar View Post
    Just to clarify: Even in that sentence, it's the stick (not the taps) hitting the floor.
    Quite so. But the phrase is possible in the right context.
    I am not a teacher.

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    Re: With first light, I hear my old neighbour

    Absolutely; possible and natural.

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