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    #1

    A group of builders, their overalls covered

    I am wondering if my sentence sounds natural.

    A group of builders, their overalls covered in white dust as if someone has thrown flour at them, sat on beer crates bantering and laughing.

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    #2

    Re: A group of builders, their overalls covered

    Consider saying "empty beer crates"; otherwise, okay.

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    Re: A group of builders, their overalls covered

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    I am wondering if my sentence sounds natural.

    A group of builders, their overalls covered in white dust as if someone had has thrown flour at them, sat on beer crates bantering and laughing.
    See above. The present simple doesn't work there.
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    Re: A group of builders, their overalls covered

    Or you could keep "has thrown" and change "sat" to "sit" to convert the whole sentence into the present tense.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    #5

    Re: A group of builders, their overalls covered

    Bassim, I chose to change the tense in the non-defining clause because that phrase read as nonessential. That is, the main verb sat felt like the one that set the time of the whole sentence.
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