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    It is necessary for all countries to work together to eradicate diseases which can spread worldwide. For example,after Tsunami, many Asian countries had caught up in severe infected afflictions; those countries had no idea to control them as they had already been suffering from the blot out. A team work of supported nations took out those countries and abolish the diseases.Thus all nations should be united to fight against any epidemic.Every year in the U.S., thousands of surplus vaccines are left to pile up and gather dust. It is better to donate them who need it rather throwing or wasting. It is an irony that on one side, we are spoiling useful medicines and the side numerous people are dying due to the unavailability of these medicines. Moreover, If the vaccines are expired, It will not only result the waste of money but will increase the danger of their misuse.It is our moral duty to help in need. The U.S. is considered the superpower because everytime we helped the necessitous countries. Maladies are one of the miseries of human which he can control through vaccines and useful treatment on time. If we are able to diminish the pain of people we should not delay to do it

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    #22

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    Please edit your post and add a space after every full stop. You have also wrongly used a capital letter after a comma twice.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    #23

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    I think you misunderstood my post. I was asking you to write three body paragraphs, not one! I've separated them for you.

    Quote Originally Posted by THOUGHTFUL View Post
    It is necessary for all countries to work together to eradicate diseases which can spread worldwide. For example, after Tsunami, many Asian countries had caught up in severe infected afflictions; those countries had no idea to control them as they had already been suffering from the blot out. A team work of supported nations took out those countries and abolish the diseases. Thus all nations should be united to fight against any epidemic.

    The tsunami is not a good example. Talk about diseases such as Swine Flu, Ebola or TB. You can also mention success stories such as polio and smallpox.

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    Every year in the U.S., thousands of surplus vaccines are left to pile up and gather dust. It is clearly better to donate them to those who need it the vaccines rather than having to store them for extended periods, which actually costs a lot of money,throwing or letting them go to waste and having to dispose of them, which is even worse. ing. It is a very sad and tragic irony that on one side, we are spoiling enormous quantities of useful vaccines, while medicines and the side numerous millions of people are dying due to the unavailability of these vaccines to them. medicines. Moreover, If the vaccines are expired, It will not only result the waste of money but will increase the danger of their misuse.
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    Quote Originally Posted by THOUGHTFUL View Post
    It is our moral duty to help people who are in need. The U.S. economy is the largest in the world, and therefore, the US can easily afford to help poorer countries with their immunization programmes. considered the superpower because everytime we helped the necessitous countries. Maladies Infectious diseases are one of the main miseries of human people in developing countries, which he and they can be effectively controlled through by vaccination. es and useful treatment on time. If we are able to diminish prevent the pain and suffering of our fellow human beings, people, we should not delay hesitate to do so. it

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    Okay, try to fix the first body paragraph, and remember to always keep your writing simple please; you have much less chance of making a mistake if you do that.

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    #24

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    Everytime I posted an essay ( two or three paragraph) in any thread. It converted into one paragraph and everytime I edited. Even I tried in the above post the but did not work.

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    #25

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    Are you writing the essay somewhere else and then copying and pasting it into the box on the forum? If so, that usually causes some problems with the formatting. Try typing it directly into the text box, using paragraph breaks where necessary.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    #26

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    It is ncessary for all countries to work together to eradicate any epidemic. For example, Polio is a deadly virus which spreads person to person. It can demage a person's brain, spine and other body parts. Every year, millions of new born are still infected with polio in developing countries. However, there is no cure for Polio disease, the vaccination can prevent from polio. Thus, we should fight against such diseases unitedly.

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    #27

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    Quote Originally Posted by THOUGHTFUL View Post
    It is necessary for all countries to work together to eradicate any epidemic. For example, Polio is a highly contagious and often deadly virus which spreads person to person. It can damage a person's brain and spine and often leaves them paralyzed. other body parts. Every year, millions of newborns are still infected with polio in developing countries. However, although there is no cure for Polio, disease, the vaccination can effectively prevent it. from polio. Another pertinent example is smallpox. That horrible disease used to kill and disfigure millions around the globe. However, thanks to concerted international effort and a rigorous immunization program, smallpox was totally eradicated from the entire globe-- it simply doesn't exist now; it's gone! Thus, we should fight against such diseases unitedly.
    Okay, now you need to think of how to transition from paragraph to paragraph. Have a look at the link below (Addition section), and use a transition word or phrase at the start of each of the paragraphs. Post the three paragraphs and pay attention to your spelling.

    http://writing.wisc.edu/Handbook/Transitions.html

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    It is necessary for all countries to work together to eradicate diseases which can spread worldwide. For example,Polio is a highly contagious and often deadly virus which can damage a person's brain and spine and leave them paralyzed. Every year, millions of newborns are still infected with Polio in developing countries. Although there is no cure for Polio, vaccination can effectively prevent it. Another pertinent example is smallpox. That horrible disease used to kill and disfigure numerous people around the world. However, concerted international efforts and rigorous immunization programmes totally eradicated smallpox from the entire globe. It doesn't exist now; It's gone.Thus all nations should be united to fight against any epidemic.

    Additionaly,every year in the U.S., thousands of surplus vaccines are left to pile up and gather dust. It is clearly better to donate them to those who need the vaccines. Storing the medicines for extended period cost a lot or throwing and disposing is even worse. It is very sad and tragic irony that we are spoiling enormous quantities of useful vaccines while million of people are dying due to the unavailability of these vaccines to them.

    Moreover, It is our moral duty to help the people who are in need. The U.S. economy is the largest in the world, therefore , the U.S. can easily afford to help poorer countries with their immunization programmes. Infectious disease are the one of the main miseries of people in developing countries and they can be effectively controlled by vaccination. If we are able to prevent the pain and suffering of fellow human beings we should not hasitate to do so.

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    #29

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    Quote Originally Posted by THOUGHTFUL View Post
    It is necessary for all countries to work together to eradicate diseases which can spread worldwide. For example, Polio is a highly contagious and often deadly virus which can damage a person's brain and spine and leave them paralyzed. Every year, millions of newborns are still infected with Polio in developing countries. Although there is no cure for Polio, vaccination can effectively prevent it. Another pertinent example is smallpox. That horrible disease used to kill and disfigure numerous people around the world. However, concerted international efforts and rigorous immunization programmes totally eradicated smallpox from the entire globe. It doesn't exist now; It's gone. Thus all nations should be united to fight against any epidemic.

    Additionally, every year in the U.S., thousands of surplus vaccines are left to pile up and gather dust. It is clearly better to donate them to those who need the vaccines. Storing the medicines for extended periods cost money, a lot or throwing and disposing of them as they expire is even worse. It is a very sad and tragic irony that we are spoiling enormous quantities of useful vaccines while millions of people are dying due to the unavailability of these vaccines to them.

    Moreover, It is our moral duty to help the people those who are in need. The U.S. economy is the largest in the world; therefore , the U.S. can easily afford to help poorer countries with their immunization programmes. Infectious disease are the one of the main miseries of people in developing countries, and they can be effectively controlled by vaccination. If we are able to prevent the pain and suffering of our fellow human beings we should not hesitate to do so.
    Note corrections above.

    Now you need to write an introduction and a conclusion. Try writing those and post the them below.

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    #30

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    Introduction :
    Diseases distrupt humanity regardless of race,gender and nationality;however, developed countries controlled most of them through vaccinations and treatments on time. Many people in developing countries are still suffering from several severe diseases which can cure and eliminate. Therefore, the U.S. should support to exterminate those diseases through donate the medications and help as a team member against those maladies which are a curse on mankind.

    Conclusion:
    In short, developed countries like the U.S. should make serious assisting efforts to completely eradicate those disease which have cures and solutions. Other than, those diseases will continue to rise and burden unnecessary spending which can be use in progress and advancement.

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