Persuasive essay

[THOUGHTFUL]

Should U.S. assist developing countries with immunization. Support your views with examples.

 

[teechar]

Should the U.S. assist developing countries with immunizations? Support your views with examples.

Can you tell us where you found that essay prompt please?

 

[emsr2d2]

Also, please tell us what you are going to do with your essay once it's finished.

 

[THOUGHTFUL]

Can you tell us where you found that essay prompt please?

https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/20-persuasive-essay-topics-help-get-started/
I found it here.

 

[THOUGHTFUL]

Also, please tell us what you are going to do with your essay once it's finished.

I will do my best to enhance my writing skills by analyze my essays with the help of this essay.

 

[teechar]

https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/20-persuasive-essay-topics-help-get-started/
I found it here.

You did not quote the prompt correctly, and that made it seem as if it was poorly coined. :-( It is very important that you quote text exactly as you find it. You omitted "the" from "the US" and "efforts" from the end of that prompt. That may not seem important to you, but it is!

Okay, now you need to to brainstorm and come up with ideas for this essay. Remember to focus on the given question to ensure that you stay on topic and not stray outside the scope of the essay. Think of points supporting the idea and points against it. Give yourself a maximum of 20 minutes to do that. Then write those (in point form) and post them here. Don't worry too much about grammar, and try to keep the points as concise as possible.

 

[THOUGHTFUL]

I will be careful about those unexpected errors.

 

[THOUGHTFUL]

Supporting Points :
1. Globelization spreading diseases all over the world.Their eradication is necessary.
2. Developed countries like The U.S. have better plan and sources to deal with diseases.
3. Diseases are curse for humanity, we should resolve it by unitedly.

Opposing Ideas:
1. Diseases are indirectly controlling the population.
2. It will burden the U.S. economy and their people.
3. Developing countries have to take serious and basic steps. Any help is only a westage of money without these steps.

 

[teechar]

Supporting Points :
1. Globelization spreading diseases all over the world.Their eradication is necessary. [That's off topic.]
2. Developed countries like The U.S. have better plan and sources to deal with diseases. [I'm not sure how this relates to that essay. I suspect this is also off topic.]
3. Diseases are curse for humanity, we should resolve it by unitedly. [Why?]

Opposing Ideas:
1. Diseases are indirectly controlling the population. [What?! That's off topic and potentially highly controversial!]
2. It will burden the U.S. economy and their people. [Usable point]
3. Developing countries have to take serious and basic steps. Any help is only a waste of money without these steps. [Usable point]

You only have two usable (against) points. Try again. Think hard!

 

[THOUGHTFUL]

Supporting points:
1.To support all countries as a team to fight against any epidemic.
2.To analyze the effect of new discovered medications on different people belonged to developed as well as developing countries.
3. Donating to the developing countries is better option than throw the surplus medication before expire.
Opposing ideas:
1.

 

[THOUGHTFUL]

Opposing ideas:
1. Immunization is not as effective in developing countries as developed one because of several reason.
2. The basic needs are incomplete in developing countries which have to fulfill before immunization.
3. The medication only cure the disease not the cause of diseases.

 

[teechar]

Supporting points:
1.To support all countries as a team to fight against any epidemic which could spread globally. [OK]
2.To analyze the effect of new discovered medications on different people belonged to developed as well as developing countries. [Not OK! This is very controversial! People are not guinea pigs!]
3. Donating to the developing countries is better option than throw the surplus medication before expire. [OK]

Opposing ideas:
1. Immunization is not as effective in developing countries as developed one because of several reason. [That's unclear.]
2. The basic needs are incomplete in developing countries which have to fulfill before immunization. [That's off topic.]
3. The medication only cure the disease not the cause of diseases.[OK; same as opposing point #3 in post #8 above]
[You can also use opposing point #2 in post #8 above]

You could have also mentioned the humanitarian aspect in the supporting points.

Now you need to decide which position to take (for or against the idea). Which one do you want to adopt- for or against?

 

[THOUGHTFUL]

May I write two essay one in support and other in oppose?

 

[emsr2d2]

May I write two essay one in support and other in oppose?

For practice, yes.

 

[teechar]

May I write two essays- one in support and the other against? [STRIKE]in oppose?[/STRIKE]

Yes, but not at this stage!

Just choose one position for now- either for or against. DO NOT write the essay at this stage. Just choose your position and let us know what it is.

 

[THOUGHTFUL]

Ok. I Agree with the statement that the U.S. should support developing countries with immunization efforts.

 

[teechar]

Okay, take supporting points #1 and #3 from post #12, as well as my suggested point about the humanitarian aspect, and write a clear, simple and direct sentence for each. You can number the sentences 1,2 and 3.

By the way, how many words is this essay supposed to be?

 

[THOUGHTFUL]

By the way, how many words is this essay supposed to be?[/QUOTE]

Minimum 300 words.

 

[THOUGHTFUL]

1. It is necessary to work together to eradicate those maladies.
2.Every year in the U.S., thousands of extra medications are produced and purchased for health.
3.It is our moral duty to help those who are dying.

 

[teechar]

Good. You can use each of these sentences as the topic sentence for a body paragraph. Take each one (as amended) and develop the idea further (explain and give examples where appropriate). Do not stray off topic; it is important to remain within the scope of the paragraph as defined by the topic sentence. Write your three body paragraphs and post them below.

It is necessary for all countries to work together to eradicate diseases which can spread worldwide. [STRIKE]those maladies.[/STRIKE]

Every year in the U.S., thousands of [STRIKE]extra medications[/STRIKE] surplus vaccines are left to pile up and gather dust. [STRIKE]produced and purchased for health.[/STRIKE]

It is our moral duty to help those who are in need. [STRIKE]dying.[/STRIKE]