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    #1

    Clive sat on a grassy bank

    I am wondering if my sentence sounds natural.

    Clive sat on a grassy bank, watching the crystal-clear brook burble past.

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    #2

    Re: Clive sat on a grassy bank

    Perfectly natural to my ear

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    #3

    Re: Clive sat on a grassy bank

    Rivers tend to move so I don't really see the need for "burbling past". I would change the end to "... watching the burbling, crystal-clear brook".
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    #4

    Re: Clive sat on a grassy bank

    I was troubled by that, too. The water burbles; you could write he watched the water in the creek burble past.
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