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    #1

    Joe gave the car model to his uncle, but it was broken, so in order to be repair

    Hello.

    Are the following sentences grammatically correct?

    "Joe gave the car model to his uncle, but it was broken, so in order to be repair it should be glued and painted again, also even in parts where the model was a single piece."

    Thanks.

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    #2

    Re: Joe gave the car model to his uncle, but it was broken, so in order to be repair

    You've written a single sentence but it should be divided into at least two.
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    #3

    Re: Joe gave the car model to his uncle, but it was broken, so in order to be repair

    There is only one sentence and it's a mess.

    Try again, using two sentences.

    Change car model to model car.

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    Re: Joe gave the car model to his uncle, but it was broken, so in order to be repair

    This is my second attemp:

    "After Kevin yelled at him, Joe gave the model car to his uncle. It was broken, so in order to be repaired it should be glued and painted again, even in parts where the model was a single piece."


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    #5

    Re: Joe gave the car model to his uncle, but it was broken, so in order to be repair

    Quote Originally Posted by Nikitus View Post
    This is my second attempt:

    "After Kevin yelled at him, Joe gave the model car to his uncle. It was broken, so in order to be repaired, it should needed to/had to be glued and painted again, even in parts where the model was a single piece."


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    See above. I don't understand the underlined part.
    Last edited by teechar; 21-Feb-2017 at 16:20. Reason: added a comma
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Joe gave the car model to his uncle, but it was broken, so in order to be repair

    "Car model" sounds unnatural to my ear. It should be "model car".

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    Re: Joe gave the car model to his uncle, but it was broken, so in order to be repair

    That was pointed out in post #3 and the OP already used the better version in post #4. Please make sure you read all the responses before adding your own, to avoid unnecessary repetition.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    #8

    Re: Joe gave the car model to his uncle, but it was broken, so in order to be repair

    Dear emsr2d2:

    First of all, thanks for all your help and time.

    "...even in parts where the model was a single piece"

    A model car has big pieces to be painted and glued, for example the parachutes (front and back). When the nephew took the model, he break even the parachutes, converting it into two pieces, so when the uncle repairs the model, he will even glue the parachutes, because now they are 2 separate pieces, different from the original model car.

    Thanks.

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    Re: Joe gave the car model to his uncle, but it was broken, so in order to be repair

    Parachutes? Do you mean these?

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    Re: Joe gave the car model to his uncle, but it was broken, so in order to be repair

    Last edited by Matthew Wai; 23-Feb-2017 at 15:31. Reason: A better photo.
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