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I'm self studying IELTS and I don't know if my write ups is correct, below is my sample work, please help me.
IELTS Writing Task 2 Question:
People should be allowed to continue to work for as long as they want to, and not be forced to retire at a particular age such as 60 or 65.
Do you agree or disagree?
My Answer:
Individuals ages 60 to 65 is not tolerable to retire as they want to continue work after age of retirement brackets. I absolutely agree to this idea, it will help for them in some view.
There are several advantages for people ages above 60 if they still continue to work. Firstly, their goals in life will not stop, their daily activities will keep going. For example, they try to get up early in the morning to take a bath, to prepare food for breakfast and to leave at home quickly to avoid traffic rush hour in going to work just to keep on time in working place. As they stay working they keep their mind busy and forget unnecessary things that can cause them anxiety. Most especially it will give them courage that they are still useful in spite of their old age, and this could motivate them to work harder to give example to the young people.
On the other hand, their salary is a big help for them in addition to their pension as we all know that the medicine maintenance for old age is terribly high, in this case it will lessen the burden of their love ones. It will help also to boost their emotions because old age people mostly they have high ego to ask assistance from other for their personal needs. Most of them they, just keep in secret their necessary things even though they badly need it.
I believe people over 60 years are allowable to work, granting that they are physically fit to work through the affirmation from the license physician.
IELTS Writing Task 2 Question:
People should be allowed to continue to work for as long as they want to, and not be forced to retire at a particular age such as 60 or 65.
Do you agree or disagree?
My Answer:
Individuals ages 60 to 65 is not tolerable to retire as they want to continue work after age of retirement brackets. I absolutely agree to this idea, it will help for them in some view.
There are several advantages for people ages above 60 if they still continue to work. Firstly, their goals in life will not stop, their daily activities will keep going. For example, they try to get up early in the morning to take a bath, to prepare food for breakfast and to leave at home quickly to avoid traffic rush hour in going to work just to keep on time in working place. As they stay working they keep their mind busy and forget unnecessary things that can cause them anxiety. Most especially it will give them courage that they are still useful in spite of their old age, and this could motivate them to work harder to give example to the young people.
On the other hand, their salary is a big help for them in addition to their pension as we all know that the medicine maintenance for old age is terribly high, in this case it will lessen the burden of their love ones. It will help also to boost their emotions because old age people mostly they have high ego to ask assistance from other for their personal needs. Most of them they, just keep in secret their necessary things even though they badly need it.
I believe people over 60 years are allowable to work, granting that they are physically fit to work through the affirmation from the license physician.