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    Thumbs up part of my resume that I am unsure of

    Hi

    This is part of my resume which I am unsure of.

    Would you be able to correct my resume, if there is any sentence that you might find it tough to understand or that has grammar-related issue ?
    It would be very appreciated if you give me some suggestions on my resume.


    Responsibilities
    ® Re-issued incorrect invoices; issued credit note and refund <- ( I am not sure about the use of ';' )
    ® Assisted with budgeting of all XX(company name) properties, adjusting CPI and marketing rate for new F/Y 2016-2017 and reconciling them ( is it comprehensible ? )
    ® Reconciling various financial reports including GST and sundry data as needed
    ® Assisted with the Year End audit process, particularly classifying recoverable outgoings and reconciling them by store (Is it comprehensible and grammatically correct ?)

    ® Ran supermarket chain - ordered, received and replenished stock and handled cash register while simultaneously marketing products by successfully achieving expected yearly profit margin ( is it comprehensible and the format(structure) is fine to use on resume? )

    Acheivements
    1) Used strong attention to detail to find and clear some items that had been sitting on suspense accounts for a few years, which were caused by wrong adjustment of journal entries ( is it comprehensible ?)
    2) Achieved target profit margin; recognized for multitasking and communication skills with customers


    Thanks you sooooooooo much in advance and have a nice weekend :)

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    Re: part of my resume that I am unsure of

    Quote Originally Posted by realize2010 View Post
    Hi,
    Hello realize2010. Welcome back after a long absence.

    Quote Originally Posted by realize2010 View Post
    This is a part of my resume which that I am unsure about. of.

    Would you be able to correct my resume, if there is any sentence that you might find it tough to understand or that has grammar-related issues?

    I would be very really appreciated it if you give me some suggestions on my resume.


    Responsibilities
    * Re-issued incorrect corrected invoices, issued credit notes and handled refunds
    * Assisted with budgeting of for all XX (company name) properties, adjusting for CPI and marketing rates for new F/Y 2016-2017 F/Yand reconciling them (is it comprehensible?) [What did you adjust- costs, payments, etc.?]
    * Reconciled ing various financial reports including GST and sundry data as needed
    * Assisted with the year-end audit process, particularly with classifying recoverable outgoings and reconciling them by store. (Is it comprehensible and grammatically correct ?)

    * Ran Managed supermarket chain - ordered, received and replenished stock, supervised day-to-day operations and handled cash register while simultaneously marketing products by successfully achieved ing expected yearly profit margin. ( is it comprehensible and the format(structure) is fine to use on resume? )

    Achievements
    1) Used With strong attention to detail, I systematically managed to identify to find and clear some items that had been sitting on in suspense accounts for a few years as a result of incorrect which were caused by wrong adjustment of journal entries ( is it comprehensible ?)
    2) Achieved target profit margin and recognized for multitasking and effective communication skills with customers
    See above.

    Quote Originally Posted by realize2010 View Post
    Thanks you so oooooooo much in advance, and have a nice weekend.
    You too.

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    Re: part of my resume that I am unsure of

    Thank you so much for responding and welcoming me.

    * Assisted with budgeting offor all XX (company name) properties, adjusting for CPI and marketing rates for new F/Y 2016-2017 F/Yand reconciling them (is it comprehensible?) [What did you adjust- costs, payments, etc.?]

    In the sentence above, do you mean I need to mention a specific object to adjust for? like adjusting for CPI and marketing rates for costs of budget for 2016-2017 F/Y ? or is it still wrong ?
    Do you think it would be better to say that I assisted with budgeting for XX company, calculating costs reflecting CPI and marketing rates for F/Y ending 2017 ?

    * RanManaged supermarket chain - ordered, received and replenished stock, supervised day-to-day operations and handled cash register while simultaneously marketing products by successfully achieved ing expected yearly profit margin.

    I wanted to show that I have an ability of multitasking in this sentence. That's why I put ' while simultaneously ~~~"
    As you see, I took lots of tasks that seems that one person find it tough to handle, but I made it.
    Is there any way that I can emphasize my ability to multitask in this sentence ?

    Last of all, what do you think about this sentence ?
    ® Reconciled budget for 2016-2017 F/Y, allocating the right proportion of costs to individual store based on agreed terms& conditions

    Thanks

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    Re: part of my resume that I am unsure of

    Quote Originally Posted by realize2010 View Post

    Assisted with budgeting for all XX (company name) properties, adjusting costs for CPI and market rates.
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    "Multitasking" is mentioned a few lines below. It would be overkill to repeat it.

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    Quote Originally Posted by realize2010 View Post
    Last of all, what do you think about this sentence ?
    ® Reconciled budget for 2016-2017 F/Y, allocating the right proportion of costs to individual store based on agreed terms& conditions
    No, don't use it. Stick with the above.

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