[Resume] part of my resume that I am unsure of

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realize2010

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Hi

This is part of my resume which I am unsure of.

Would you be able to correct my resume, if there is any sentence that you might find it tough to understand or that has grammar-related issue ?
It would be very appreciated if you give me some suggestions on my resume.


Responsibilities
® Re-issued incorrect invoices; issued credit note and refund <- ( I am not sure about the use of ';' )
® Assisted with budgeting of all XX(company name) properties, adjusting CPI and marketing rate for new F/Y 2016-2017 and reconciling them ( is it comprehensible ? )
® Reconciling various financial reports including GST and sundry data as needed
® Assisted with the Year End audit process, particularly classifying recoverable outgoings and reconciling them by store (Is it comprehensible and grammatically correct ?)

® Ran supermarket chain - ordered, received and replenished stock and handled cash register while simultaneously marketing products by successfully achieving expected yearly profit margin ( is it comprehensible and the format(structure) is fine to use on resume? )

Acheivements
1) Used strong attention to detail to find and clear some items that had been sitting on suspense accounts for a few years, which were caused by wrong adjustment of journal entries ( is it comprehensible ?)
2) Achieved target profit margin; recognized for multitasking and communication skills with customers


Thanks you sooooooooo much in advance and have a nice weekend :)
 

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Hello realize2010. Welcome back after a long absence. :)

This is a part of my resume [STRIKE]which[/STRIKE] that I am unsure about. [STRIKE]of.[/STRIKE]

Would you be able to correct my resume, if there is any sentence that you might find it tough to understand or that has grammar-related issues?

I would [STRIKE]be very[/STRIKE] really appreciated it if you give me some suggestions on my resume.


Responsibilities
* Re-issued [STRIKE]incorrect[/STRIKE] corrected invoices, issued credit notes and handled refunds
* Assisted with budgeting [STRIKE]of[/STRIKE] for all XX (company name) properties, adjusting for CPI and marketing rates [STRIKE]for new F/Y[/STRIKE] 2016-2017 F/Yand reconciling them (is it comprehensible?) [What did you adjust- costs, payments, etc.?]
* Reconciled [STRIKE]ing[/STRIKE] various financial reports including GST and sundry data as needed
* Assisted with [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] year-end audit process, particularly with classifying recoverable outgoings and reconciling them by store. [STRIKE](Is it comprehensible and grammatically correct ?)[/STRIKE]

* [STRIKE]Ran[/STRIKE] Managed supermarket chain - ordered, received and replenished stock, supervised day-to-day operations and [STRIKE]handled cash register while simultaneously marketing products by[/STRIKE] successfully achieved [STRIKE]ing[/STRIKE] expected yearly profit margin. [STRIKE]( is it comprehensible and the format(structure) is fine to use on resume? ) [/STRIKE]

Achievements
1) [STRIKE]Used[/STRIKE] With strong attention to detail, I systematically managed to identify [STRIKE]to find[/STRIKE] and clear some items that had been sitting [STRIKE]on[/STRIKE] in suspense accounts for a few years as a result of incorrect [STRIKE]which were caused by wrong[/STRIKE] adjustment of journal entries [STRIKE]( is it comprehensible ?)[/STRIKE]
2) Achieved target profit margin and recognized for multitasking and effective communication skills with customers

See above.

Thanks you so [STRIKE]oooooooo[/STRIKE] much in advance, and have a nice weekend.
You too. ;-)
 

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Thank you so much for responding and welcoming me.

* Assisted with budgeting of for all XX (company name) properties, adjusting for CPI and marketing rates for new F/Y 2016-2017 F/Yand reconciling them (is it comprehensible?) [What did you adjust- costs, payments, etc.?]

In the sentence above, do you mean I need to mention a specific object to adjust for? like adjusting for CPI and marketing rates for costs of budget for 2016-2017 F/Y ? or is it still wrong ?
Do you think it would be better to say that I assisted with budgeting for XX company, calculating costs reflecting CPI and marketing rates for F/Y ending 2017 ?

* Ran Managed supermarket chain - ordered, received and replenished stock, supervised day-to-day operations and handled cash register while simultaneously marketing products by successfully achieved ing expected yearly profit margin.

I wanted to show that I have an ability of multitasking in this sentence. That's why I put ' while simultaneously ~~~"
As you see, I took lots of tasks that seems that one person find it tough to handle, but I made it.
Is there any way that I can emphasize my ability to multitask in this sentence ?

Last of all, what do you think about this sentence ?
® Reconciled budget for 2016-2017 F/Y, allocating the right proportion of costs to individual store based on agreed terms& conditions

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Assisted with budgeting for all XX (company name) properties, adjusting costs for CPI and market rates.
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"Multitasking" is mentioned a few lines below. It would be overkill to repeat it.

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Last of all, what do you think about this sentence ?
® Reconciled budget for 2016-2017 F/Y, allocating the right proportion of costs to individual store based on agreed terms& conditions
No, don't use it. Stick with the above.
 
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