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    John was drunk and fumbled in the darkness

    I am wondering if my sentence sounds natural.

    John was drunk and fumbled in the darkness until he found the key to the house under the flowerpot and opened the door.

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    #2

    Re: John was drunk and fumbled in the darkness

    There is a slight (and quite amusing) ambiguity in the second half of your sentence. Can you see what it is?
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: John was drunk and fumbled in the darkness

    emsr2d2,

    I read my sentence many times but, unfortunately, I am unable to tell you where I made a mistake. Should I write "of the house" instead of "to"?

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    Re: John was drunk and fumbled in the darkness

    Did he find "the key to the house" + "under the flowerpot" or did he (amusingly) find "the key" + "to the house under the flowerpot"?
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    Re: John was drunk and fumbled in the darkness

    Would my sentence be correct like this:

    John was drunk and fumbled in the darkness, until under the flowerpot he found the key to the house and opened the door.

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    Re: John was drunk and fumbled in the darkness

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    Would my sentence be correct like this:

    John was drunk and fumbled in the darkness, until under the flowerpot he found the key to the house and opened the door.
    It's not natural like that. Try having John fumble (unambiguously) under the flowerpot.
    I am not a teacher.

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    #7

    Re: John was drunk and fumbled in the darkness

    Here is my third try:

    John was drunk and fumbled under the flowerpot in the darkness, until he found the key to the house and opened the door.

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    #8

    Re: John was drunk and fumbled in the darkness

    That's fine except for the comma which doesn't belong.
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