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    #1

    Help check my letter, many thanks.

    Mrs Wilson,

    I am ready to go out today and inform you of something. One thing is that I have returned your book to the library in time. Besides, Tracy called and left a message to tell you that the meeting at Bolton Coffee has been canceled and Susan already has knowed. She hopt you recall her as soon as possible. What's more, it's my first time that I have went shopping abroad. That's will be fun.

    That's all. Having a good day.

    Yours,

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    #2

    Re: Help check my letter, many thanks.

    Hello bigsky888, and welcome to the forum.
    Could you please correct the information on your profile page first?

    Note that "having a good day" means "I am having a good day", whereas "have a good day" means "I wish you have a good day."
    Last edited by teechar; 27-Feb-2017 at 01:13. Reason: incorrect profile info

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    #3

    Re: Help check my letter, many thanks.

    Mrs Wilson,

    I am going out shopping today and I’d like to inform you of three things. One thing is that I have returned your book to the library in time. Besides, Tracy called and left a message to tell you that the meeting at Bolton Coffee had been canceled, and she felt very sorry about that, but hoped that you could set some other time for the meeting. Also, she wanted you to know that Susan had already been told. What's more, she asked you to call her back as soon as possible. By the way, it's my first time to go shopping abroad. I am sure that will be fun.

    Have a good day.

    Yours,

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    Bigsky888, see the version above. It is my attempt at correcting your letter.
    Last edited by rodgers white; 27-Feb-2017 at 15:24.

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    #4

    Re: Help check my letter, many thanks.

    Quote Originally Posted by rodgers white View Post
    she asked that you to call her back as soon as possible.
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    #5

    Re: Help check my letter, many thanks.

    I am going out shopping today and I’d like to inform you of three things. One The first thing is that I have returned your book to the library in on time.

    I think "of" is optional but I prefer to have the sentence without it.
    Being punctual for something is being "on time" for it.
    I am not a teacher or a native speaker.

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    #6

    Re: Help check my letter, many thanks.

    "I'd like to inform you three things" is incorrect. You can use "tell" without a preposition but not "inform".

    I'd like to tell you three things.
    I'd like to inform you of three things.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    #7

    Re: Help check my letter, many thanks.

    OK, then I would rather use "tell" than "inform..of/about".
    "One thing" does not connect with the "three things".
    I am not a teacher or a native speaker.

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