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    #1

    The man to whose party I was invited

    I am wondering if my sentence sounds natural. Would you please correct my mistakes?

    The man to whose party I was invited became drunk and went to sleep even before first guests started leaving.

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    #2

    Re: The man to whose party I was invited

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    I am wondering if my sentence sounds natural. Would you please correct my mistakes?

    The man to whose party I was invited to became drunk and went to fell asleep even before the first guests started leaving.
    See above. "To whose party I was invited" is grammatically correct but very formal and stiff-sounding. I struck out "even" because I couldn't find a natural place to put it in the sentence and I thought it didn't add much.
    I am not a teacher.

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    Re: The man to whose party I was invited

    I agree with GS about the construction of the first part. I would leave "even" in but I would end with "... he fell asleep before even the first guests had left".
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    #4

    Re: The man to whose party I was invited

    I'd say 'got drunk' - not 'became drunk'.
    Last edited by Rover_KE; 28-Feb-2017 at 23:35.

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    #5

    Re: The man to whose party I was invited

    For me, even more natural English would be:
    The guy who invited me to his party got drunk and passed out while the party was still going on.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    #6

    Re: The man to whose party I was invited

    Barbs sentence sounds the best to me. I know what Bessim meant with "even", but very often our "even" is not in the spirit of English language "even".
    I'm not an English teacher. English is not my native language. Feel free to correct any sentence I write, regardless of the topic. It's a great way of learning and practicing English. Thank you!

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