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    government and diet

    Please help to improve the essay formation.

    Should the government meddle in our dietary choice? Support your answer with examples.( This prompt got from a practice book.)


    Although, eating is a personal choice, It should be restricted by the government. Eating habits play a significant role in a person's life. It reflects on the bhysical body and mental health. The government should interfere in people's diet to control the critical health disease, promote healthy habits and prevent from the unnecessary burden of medication on the economy.


    Nowadays, many people are facing several critical health issues due to unhealthy diets. For example, obesity is the major health problem in America and invites many other diseases like diabetes, stress, and heart problems. The main reason of obesity is unhealthy and uncontrolled diet. So, the government should take some serious steps for the better future of society.


    Moreover, poor eating habits make people sick. The government should provide a healthy environment to encourage the people for healthy life. It should start from the beginning that is inside the body because what we eat, drink and inhale reflect on our health. To control the unhealthy food can be a stepping stone for the food industry, but it worths for people's health.


    Consequently, people spend lots of money on unnecessary and unhealthy food which make them sick. Later,the government has to spend a lot of money on medications which burden the government and the economy. Those money can be used in progress and development. Unhealthy people cannot contribute in the progress of the nation, but keep disturbing the budget of family and country as well. Besides, healthy people develop healthy nation.


    In conclusion, the control of the government on food will not only promote a healthy and progressive society but strengthen the economy and the development of the country.
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    Quote Originally Posted by THOUGHTFUL View Post
    Although, eating is a personal choice, It should be restricted by the government.
    You've killed the whole essay by doing that. Do you remember from your previous thread(s) what we said about how to structure an essay? Try to write a better introduction than that.

    Quote Originally Posted by THOUGHTFUL View Post
    Nowadays, many people are facing several critical suffer from various health issues due to their unhealthy diets. For example, obesity is the a major health problem in America many countries in the world, and invites it is often a cause of many other diseases like diabetes, strokes, stress, and heart problems. The main reason of behind obesity is usually an unhealthy and or uncontrolled diet. So, the government should take some serious steps to promote healthy diets for the a better future for all. of society.
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    Quote Originally Posted by THOUGHTFUL View Post
    Moreover, poor eating habits make people sick. The government should provide a healthy environment to encourage the people for healthy life. It should start from the beginning that is inside the body because what we eat, drink and inhale reflect on our health. To control the unhealthy food can be a stepping stone for the food industry, but it worths for people's health.
    That's poorly written. And in any case, how is it different from (what does it add to) the previous paragraph? Try to come up with another (different) point.


    Quote Originally Posted by THOUGHTFUL View Post
    Consequently, Furthermore, people nowadays often spend lots a lot of money on unnecessary and unhealthy food items which make them sick. Later, the government has to spend a lot of money on medications which burden the government and the economy. Those That money can be used in progress better spent on infrastructure projects and economic development. In addition, unhealthy people cannot contribute to economic growth as much as healthy people can, in the progress of the nation, but keep disturbing often represent a drain on the national budget. of family and country as well. Besides, healthy people develop make up a healthy nation, and vice versa.

    In conclusion, the control regulation of people's eating habits by the government on food will not only promote a healthy and progressive society, but also strengthen the economy and aid the development of the country.
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    Introduction:
    There are two negetive impact of food on people ; one have excessive food and get sick by overeating, the other have insufficient food and get sick by poor nutritions. Both conditions are dangerous for a healthy society. To keep the balance, the government should take serious steps. Other than, both conditions resulted in poor health of people. Therefore,The government should interfere in people's diet to control the critical health disease, promote healthy habits and prevent from the unnecessary burden of medication on the economy.

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    government and diet

    No, that's not how to structure or write a good introduction.

    In the introduction, you need:
    - A general statement: This introduces the topic/issue to the reader. In your case the topic is eating habits or diets.
    - Background: 1 or 2 sentences to elaborate on the topic.
    - Statement of issue: talk about the issue which in this case is government involvement in restricting diets.
    - Your thesis/purpose statement: states your position regarding the essay question.
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    Introduction:
    Diet is one of the basic necessities in life. There is an ideal diet for people according to their age and requirements; most people don't follow it and get sick. Therefore, the government should control the diet for healthy society. It will not only control the diseases but unnecessary expenditure of medications also which burden the economy.
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    I wouldn't say that "diet" is a necessity. "Food" is a necessity.
    Last edited by teechar; 11-Mar-2017 at 19:59.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Quote Originally Posted by THOUGHTFUL View Post
    Introduction:
    Diet Food is one of the basic necessities in life. What we choose to eat is important, and there is an ideal diet for people according to their age and personal circumstances. requirements However, many most people don't pay close enough attention to their diet. follow it and get sick. Therefore, the government can play an important role in should controlling what's available for people to eat. the diet for healthy society. It That will not only control the reduce the incidence of many diseases, but also decrease unnecessary expenditure of on medications also which burdens the economy.
    See above.
    Now put the essay together and see if you have enough words.
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    government and diet

    Food is one of the basic necessities in life. what we choose to eat is important, and there is an ideal diet for people according to their age and personal circumstances. However, many people don't pay close enough attention to their diet. Therefore, government can play important role in controlling what is available for people to eat. That will not only reduce the incidence of many diseases, but also decrease unnecessary expenditure on medication which burdens the economy.

    Nowadays,many people suffer from various health issues due to their unhealthy diets. For example, obesity is a major health problem in many countries in the world, and it is often cause many diseases like diabetes, strokes, and heart problems. The main reason behind obesity is usually an unhealthy and uncontrolled diet. So, the government sholud take some serious steps to promote healthy diet for a better future for all.

    Furthermore, people are nowadays often spend a lot of money on unnecessary and unhealthy food items which make them sick. Later the goverment has to spend a lot of money on medication which burden the government and the economy. That money can be better spent on infrastructure project and economic development. In addition, unhealthy people can not conrtibute to economic growthas much as healthy people can, often represent a drain on the national budget. Besides, healthy people make up a healthy nationa and vice versa.

    Additionaly,in many countries,children are unable to get sufficient food and get sick. The main cause of these diseases are hunger and poverty. the government should make arrangement for a balance and sufficient diet for those who are unable to earn it at minimum level.The government can control mal-nutritious diseases such as anemia, rickets, and under-weight in children by providing necessary food. So, the government should interfere in the diet to control hunger and ill-nuturitious diseases.

    In conclusion, the regulation of people's eating habit by the government will not only promote a healthy and progressive society but also strengthen the economy and aid the development of society.
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    Quote Originally Posted by THOUGHTFUL View Post
    Food is one of the basic necessities in life. What we choose to eat is important, and there is an ideal diet for people according to their age and personal circumstances. However, many people don't pay close enough attention to their diet. Therefore, government can play an important role in controlling what is available for people to eat. That will not only reduce the incidence of many diseases, but also decrease unnecessary expenditure on medication which burdens the economy.

    Nowadays, many people suffer from various health issues due to their unhealthy diets. For example, obesity is a major health problem in many countries in the world, and it is often a cause of many diseases like diabetes, strokes, and heart problems. The main reason behind obesity is usually an unhealthy and uncontrolled diet. So, the government should take some serious steps to promote healthy diets for a better future for all.

    Furthermore, people are nowadays often spend a lot of money on unnecessary and unhealthy food items which make them sick. Later, the government has to spend a lot of money on medication which burdens the government and the economy. That money can be better spent on infrastructure projects and economic development. In addition, unhealthy people can not contribute to economic growth as much as healthy people can, but often represent a drain on the national budget. Besides, healthy people make up a healthy nation and vice versa.

    Additionally, in many countries, children are unable to get sufficient food and get sick as a result . The main cause of these diseases are of hunger and poverty. Therefore, the government should make arrangement for a balance and has a duty to ensure sufficient and healthy nutrition diet for those who are unable to provide for themselves earn it at minimum level. The government can control to avoid malnutrition us diseases such as anemia, rickets, and under-weight in children. by providing necessary food. So the government should interfere in the diet also has a duty to intervene to control hunger and malnutrition. ill-nuturitious diseases.

    In conclusion, the regulation of people's eating habits by the government will not only promote a healthy and progressive society, but also strengthen the economy and aid the development of society.
    For the meaning of "provide" highlighted in green above, take a look at entry #2.1 in the link below.
    https://en.oxforddictionaries.com/definition/provide

    Note also that I have changed the title of your thread. In future, please choose an appropriate title that reflects the subject of your question/text.
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