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    In one moment the woman was dancing

    I am wondering if my sentences sound natural. Would you please correct my mistakes?

    In one moment the woman was dancing happily, in another, she was clutching at her heart and breathing heavily. Her dark eyes grew large, as if she was staring right at Death.

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    Re: In one moment the woman was dancing

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    In One minute, moment the woman was dancing happily; in another, and the next minute, she was clutching at her heart and breathing heavily. Her dark eyes grew large, as if she was staring right at death.
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    Re: In one moment the woman was dancing

    teechar,

    I am wondering if it is possible to omit "minute" in the second part, and just write like this:

    One minute, the woman was dancing happily; and the next, she was clutching at her heart and breathing heavily.

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    Re: In one moment the woman was dancing

    Yes, you can omit "minute". You can also omit the first "and". In fact, I probably would omit it.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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