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    #1

    Sabina loved her husband immensely

    I am wondering if my sentence sounds natural.

    Sabina loved her husband immensely and, watching him suffer from cancer, made her feel sad.
    Last edited by Bassim; 05-Mar-2017 at 22:47.

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    #2

    Re: Sabina love her husband immensely

    Sabina's husband isn't a woman. You could write Sabina loved her husband immensely and, watching him suffer from cancer, made him feel sad but I don't think that's what you mean. (It means that Sabina made her husband sad.)

    I think these two sentences convey the meaning you're after: Sabina loved her husband immensely. Watching him suffer from cancer made her feel sad.
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    #3

    Re: Sabina love her husband immensely

    The commas are the problem in the original. Remove them and it's correct and means what you want it to.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    #4

    Re: Sabina love her husband immensely

    Thank you again for your corrections.
    I wrote this sentence because I wanted to see if I can use "bracketing commas" correctly. But apparently, my commas only made my sentence unclear.

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    #5

    Re: Sabina love her husband immensely

    Both commas are wrong.

    We don't put a comma between subjects and immediately-following predicates. In the second part of your sentence, watching him suffer from cancer is the subject of the clause, and made him feel sad is the predicate.

    The first comma is unnecessary because we don't normally use a comma after coordinating conjunctions (in this case, and).

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    #6

    Re: Sabina love her husband immensely

    jutfrank,

    Thank you so much for your good and useful explanation. You opened my eyes. The problem is that I did not see that "watching him suffer from cancer" is the subject and other part of the sentence the predicate. And when you do not see the whole sentence and do not recognise different parts of the sentence, you are likely to make mistakes like I do.

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    #7

    Re: Sabina love her husband immensely

    Bassim, as an exercise, write the corrected sentence below.

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    #8

    Re: Sabina love her husband immensely

    Here is my second try:

    Sabina loved her husband immensely and watching him suffer from cancer made her feel sad.

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    #9

    Re: Sabina love her husband immensely

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    The problem is that I did not see that "watching him suffer from cancer" is the subject and other part of the sentence the predicate. And when you do not see the whole sentence and do not recognise different parts of the sentence, you are likely to make mistakes like I do.
    Try to get into the habit of seeing your sentences in this way, then.

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    #10

    Re: Sabina love her husband immensely

    I would put a comma after "immensely" in post #8.

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