Sunflower4869
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I wrote an essay and i need to know if there is any mistakes in it please ..
The essay
"I don't know what is the dream that you have, you sometimes get disappointed while working on this dream, but you have to believe that this dream that you are holding in your mind is possible . It's hard to achieve your dream, it's not easy . In the process of working on your dream you will endure a lot of disappointment, a lot of failure, alot of pain and you will even endure moments of stop believing in yourself . The hard time will come but it will not come to stay, it come to pass away . So to achieve this dream you have to hold on and endure alot, you have to change yourself and change the way your mind think . There is nothing as powerfull as a changed mind . You can change your hair, your clothes, your address, ypur spouse and even your residence, but if you didn't change your mind you will nevet see a change in your life because everything is changing from outside but nothing inside is changed . If you wanted something in this life, if you want to change yourself, if there is a goal you want to reach then change your mind, it's a challenge and it's hard, you must be patient, you must endure alot, you have to want achieving your dream as you want to breath, you have to leave your sleep and your rest time to work again and again and again . That's how winning is done ! . Even when you think that your dream is impossible you have to believe that if someone could do it anytime in this history then it's possible and you can do it ! You have to delete impossible word from your dictionary ! . When you look to someone who is very successful and you say to yourself Wow he is amazing ! Remember that people are rewarded in public for what they practiced for years in private . Remember that greatness is not that wonderful thing that is eosteric on some people . Greatiness really exist in all of us, and you have to discover it . Most of people live their lives without developing their talents or even discover what their talents are ! . I guess the thing that will make you happy in this life is to step up and to raise your standard and discover yourself and your talents ! I guess that is hiw you will belive in your dream and that is how you will have the courage to make it come true ."
Thank you for your helping : )
The essay
"I don't know what is the dream that you have, you sometimes get disappointed while working on this dream, but you have to believe that this dream that you are holding in your mind is possible . It's hard to achieve your dream, it's not easy . In the process of working on your dream you will endure a lot of disappointment, a lot of failure, alot of pain and you will even endure moments of stop believing in yourself . The hard time will come but it will not come to stay, it come to pass away . So to achieve this dream you have to hold on and endure alot, you have to change yourself and change the way your mind think . There is nothing as powerfull as a changed mind . You can change your hair, your clothes, your address, ypur spouse and even your residence, but if you didn't change your mind you will nevet see a change in your life because everything is changing from outside but nothing inside is changed . If you wanted something in this life, if you want to change yourself, if there is a goal you want to reach then change your mind, it's a challenge and it's hard, you must be patient, you must endure alot, you have to want achieving your dream as you want to breath, you have to leave your sleep and your rest time to work again and again and again . That's how winning is done ! . Even when you think that your dream is impossible you have to believe that if someone could do it anytime in this history then it's possible and you can do it ! You have to delete impossible word from your dictionary ! . When you look to someone who is very successful and you say to yourself Wow he is amazing ! Remember that people are rewarded in public for what they practiced for years in private . Remember that greatness is not that wonderful thing that is eosteric on some people . Greatiness really exist in all of us, and you have to discover it . Most of people live their lives without developing their talents or even discover what their talents are ! . I guess the thing that will make you happy in this life is to step up and to raise your standard and discover yourself and your talents ! I guess that is hiw you will belive in your dream and that is how you will have the courage to make it come true ."
Thank you for your helping : )