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    After two bottles of wine

    I am wondering if my sentence sounds natural.

    After two bottles of wine, Peter's eyes clouded and he sank into the pit of melancholy.

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    Re: After two bottles of wine

    I would use "a (deep) state of melancholy" instead of "the pit of melancholy."

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    Re: After two bottles of wine

    teecher,
    I appreciate you help, but for me "a state of melancholy" sounds as if it were written by a psychologist describing a patient. Is there any other word I could use to describe his unhappiness.
    Could I write like this:
    "He sank into the depths of melancholy."

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    #4

    Re: After two bottles of wine

    I'd say depression rather than melancholy.

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    #5

    Re: After two bottles of wine

    Rover_KE,

    I am wondering if it is correct to say:

    He sank into the depths of depression.

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    Re: After two bottles of wine

    I kind of like "pit of melancholy."

    Now excuse me while I sink back into my Slough of Despond. . . .
    I'm not a teacher. I speak American English. I've tutored writing at the University of Southern Maine and have done a good deal of copy editing and writing, occasionally for publication.

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    Re: After two bottles of wine

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    Rover_KE,

    I am wondering if it is correct to say:

    He sank into the depths of depression.
    Boring. At least say "a deep depression." Not colorful, but natural.
    I'm not a teacher. I speak American English. I've tutored writing at the University of Southern Maine and have done a good deal of copy editing and writing, occasionally for publication.

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    Re: After two bottles of wine

    I'm late to this rather depressing party but I would have left "pit of melancholy" (like Charlie, I rather like it) but would have preceded it with "a", not "the".
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: After two bottles of wine

    Nobody invites me​ to parties.
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