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    The grapevine climbed the wall

    Would you please correct the mistakes in my sentence?

    The grapevine climbed the wall; its tendrils and leaves intertwined themselves into a long balcony railing on the first floor.

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    Re: The grapevine climbed the wall

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    Would you please correct the mistakes in my sentence?


    The grapevine climbed the wall; its tendrils and leaves intertwined a long balcony railing on the first floor.

    Or:

    The grapevine climbed the wall. Its tendrils and leaves intertwined a long balcony railing on the first floor.

    Or:

    The grapevine climbed the wall, its tendrils and leaves intertwining a long balcony railing on the first floor.
    It was correct but a little wordy as you wrote it. So those are a few options.

    Personally, I think fewer semicolons make stronger writing, so I usually favor commas and periods.

    But not everyone agrees. It's a style question.
    I'm not a teacher. I speak American English. I've tutored writing at the University of Southern Maine and have done a good deal of copy editing and writing, occasionally for publication.

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