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    Gina saw a shadow sneaking outside

    Would you please correct the mistakes in my sentences?

    Gina saw a shadow sneaking outside her window. She rushed into the kitchen and rummaged in the cutlery drawer for the largest knife. If anyone came inside, she would stab him in his heart.

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    Re: Gina saw a shadow sneaking outside

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    Would you please correct the mistakes in my sentences?

    Gina saw a the shadow ​of someone sneaking ​around outside her window. She rushed into the kitchen and rummaged in the cutlery drawer for the largest knife. If anyone came inside, she would stab him in his the heart.
    See above.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Gina saw a shadow sneaking outside

    emsr2d2,

    I am only wondering do I really need to write " Gina saw the shadow of someone sneaking..."? If I write just "Gina saw the shadow sneaking around..," is that ungrammatical? Is just "shadow" not enough to tell the reader that there is someone around?

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    Re: Gina saw a shadow sneaking outside

    Shadows don't sneak. You have to be animate to sneak. It would be like seeing a shadow walk.
    I'm not a teacher. I speak American English. I've tutored writing at the University of Southern Maine and have done a good deal of copy editing and writing, occasionally for publication.

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