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    When Laura discovered that her son

    I am wondering if my sentences sound natural. Would you please correct my mistakes?

    When Laura discovered that her son played truant and smoked cigarettes, it sent her into rage. She warned him she had to cut down his pocket money until he changed his behaviour.

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    Re: When Laura discovered that her son

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    I am wondering if my sentences sound natural. Would you please correct my mistakes?

    When Laura discovered that her son frequently played truant and smoked cigarettes, it sent her into a rage. She warned him she had would/was going to to cut down reduce his pocket money until he changed his behaviour.
    See above.

    I added "frequently" because I assumed that she hadn't just found out about one occasion on which he played truant. If that was the case, I would use "When Laura discovered that her son had played truant, ...". If it had happened on just a few occasions, but all recently, I'd use "When Laura discovered that her son had been playing truant, ...".
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: When Laura discovered that her son

    I think "sent her into a rage" is a bit too strong.

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    Re: When Laura discovered that her son

    In the US, we don't say "played truant." We say "played hooky" or "cut school."
    I'm not a teacher. I speak American English. I've tutored writing at the University of Southern Maine and have done a good deal of copy editing and writing, occasionally for publication.

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