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Hello,
Please review this paragraph of comparing two authors view.

Quincy Adams speech disagree with Albert Beveridge speech in terms of foreign affairs involvement.
In my opinion Quincy Adams speech is fair because it is against the United States violation and involvement in other countries Freedom and liberty by force, As he said “America goes not abroad, in search of monsters to destroy”. But Amercia will influence the other countries by giving good examples.
However, Albert Beveridge opinion in how the United States should act with the rest of the world is unfair because he thinks that the United States needs to impose rules and acquire territories without their consent so America leads the world in all areas by saying “We govern the Indians without their consent, we govern our territories without their consent, we govern our children without their consent”.
Which is against the fundamentals of the democracy.

Thank you !
 
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Welcome to the forum. :hi:

What are you going to do with this piece of writing when it's ready?
 

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Thank you emsr2d2
Well I'm preparing for GED test and still my writing is not good enough that's why I'm seeking help.
 

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Meeteur, can you please first provide the correct information on your profile?
 

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Done ! I'm sorry I was little bit confused with where I can post my paragraph to be reviewed, And Eglish is my third language after French and Arabic.
 
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Yes I'm in Algeria. I'll be back to Rodez. Thank you for correcting me. Would you correct my pragraph?And are you native english speaker.
 
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Yes I'm in Algeria. I'll be back to Rodez. Thank you for correcting me. Would you correct my paragraph? And are you a native English speaker.
I give up! You were asked several times to correct the information on your profile, and you haven't done so. I'll leave it to someone else to help with your paragraph if they feel like it.
 

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Yes I'm in Algeria.

Then your Current Location should say "Algeria". When you go back to France, change it so that it says "France".
 
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