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    please advise me for the sentence below, I wrote to contact at e-mail is correct or not.
    Thanks

    Dear All,

    Please find the attached (name) report of 30 March, 2017.
    Could you check the following list, it may have some problems.
    PO. Shown not found, there will be 2 brands consist of Name A and Name B.
    PO. Shown delivery on Feb 15, 2017, there will be the brand Name C.

    Remarks
    - Some POs shown delivery date on March have been delayed also, please find and check.
    - The documentation will be passed to (Person name) for report at the Manager Meeting tomorrow morning.


    **PO is purchase order.
    -----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

    and if I have to inform my superior about the leave, the sentence below is correct or not, please advise me.

    I will take a substitute holiday leave on Monday from working on Saturday (company event).

    (As I worked on the holiday for the spacial event of the company, so I got a holiday instead over-time paid.)
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    Re: Text for proofreading

    Quote Originally Posted by Sujing View Post
    Please advise help me for with the sentence email below. , I wrote to contact at e-mail is correct or not.
    Thanks.

    Dear All,

    Please find the attached (name) report of 30 March, 2017.
    Could you check the following list? It may have some problems.
    PO # 1234 showing not found. there will be 2 brands consist of Name A and Name B.
    PO # 1122 showing delivery on Feb 15, 2017. there will be the brand Name C.

    Remarks:
    - Some POs showing delivery date on in March have been delayed also. Please find and check.
    - The documentation will be passed to (Person name) for report at the Manager Meeting tomorrow morning.


    **PO is purchase order.
    -----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

    and If I have to inform my superior about the leave, is the sentence below is correct? or not, Please advise me.

    I will take a substitute holiday leave a day off on Monday from in lieu of working on Saturday(company event).

    As I worked on the holiday Saturday for the spacial a special company event, I would like to get a day off of the company, so I got a holiday instead of overtime pay. paid.)
    I don't understand the text I highlighted in red.

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    Re: Text for proofreading

    Quote Originally Posted by teechar View Post
    I don't understand the text I highlighted in red.
    "(name) is the name of report, I did not show the real name."

    "there will be 2 brands consist ofName A and Name B.there will be the brand Name C."--> there are 2 brand name of the name of brand, I did not show the real name.

    "for report at the Manager Meeting"--> to report in meeting.

    Thank so much for your help.

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    What do you mean by "there will be?"

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    Re: Text for proofreading

    Quote Originally Posted by teechar View Post
    What do you mean by "there will be?"
    How do I say?... When we have to describe "have something" but we didn't indicate who has.

    Present simple tense use There is..., There are...
    Present perfect tense use There have been...
    Present future rense use There will be...

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    Quote Originally Posted by Sujing View Post
    PO # 1122 showing delivery on Feb 15, 2017. there will be the brand Name C.
    I don't understand the above. Are you referring to the past, present or future? Rewrite it using different/more words.

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    Quote Originally Posted by teechar View Post
    I don't understand the above. Are you referring to the past, present or future? Rewrite it using different/more words.
    Thanks Teechar,

    I reffered to the past, because this report shows the delivey date is expected in March.
    PO. Showing on Feb means the derivery hasn't yet finished or so delayed.

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    Okay, I think I understand some of it. I think you mean to say:
    The items have not been delivered.
    or
    Not all the items have been delivered.
    or
    The order is delayed.
    However, I still don't understand what you mean by "there will be brand X." Why do you use a future tense?
    Maybe you mean "the order should have item nos. 1234, 4444 and 2323."

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    Quote Originally Posted by teechar View Post
    Okay, I think I understand some of it. I think you mean to say:
    The items have not been delivered.
    or
    Not all the items have been delivered.
    or
    The order is delayed.
    However, I still don't understand what you mean by "there will be brand X." Why do you use a future tense?
    Maybe you mean "the order should have item nos. 1234, 4444 and 2323."
    Hi Teechar,

    Sorry for my complication, let me explain again.

    I have selling the goods via internet as a pre-order, then the customer bought and wait for receiving it.
    I ordered the goods from the vendor and appointed the date for delivery.
    I made a report to show the sale, Brand, PO#, Delivery date.
    For example of the report.

    Brand A.
    PO#1234 delivery date. 20/3/2017 the sale is X,XXX.-

    Brand B.
    PO#1235 delivery date. 20/4/2017 the sale is XX,XXX.-

    Then I write today.
    Please see the PO#1234 showing the delayed in delivery, there will be Brand A.

    As you mention above, "why do I use the future tense?" I thought, it may be incorrect.
    I should write " there is or there was", shouldn't you?

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    Re: Text for proofreading

    Quote Originally Posted by Sujing View Post
    I have am selling the goods via the internet as a pre-order, then the customer bought some and is waiting for to receive ing it.
    I ordered the goods from the vendor and appointed indicated the date for delivery.
    I made a report to show the sale, brand, PO#, and delivery date.
    For example, of in the report:

    Brand A.
    PO#1234, delivery date 20/3/2017, the sale order value is X,XXX.-

    Brand B.
    PO#1235, delivery date 20/4/2017 the sale order value is XX,XXX.-

    Then I write today.
    Please see the PO#1234 showing the delayed in delivery. there will be The order is for 50 Nike Hot Air shoes. Brand A.

    As you mention above, "why do I use the future tense?" I thought, it may be incorrect.
    I should write " there is or there was", shouldn't I? you?
    See corrections above. If the text in blue is not what you want, post back.

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