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Would you please correct the mistakes in my sentences?
Bob sat in the main square, drinking a Coke. He took pleasure in the hordes of tourists, passersby, souvenir stalls, street vendors, buskers, and the music pouring out of cafes and patisseries.
I'm not sure where Bob is but in my experience in continental Europe, France in particular, they don't usually play music in patisseries.
Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.
teechar,
I think that the word "watching" is redundant because the words describe what he sees: tourists, passersby, buskers...
It's not redundant. You can't just "take pleasure in tourists etc". You take pleasure in an action.
Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.
I was going to say that it is not redundant, but emsr2d2 beat me to it.
In fact, I would even add "listening to" before "the music" in that sentence.
So after you corrections, would my sentence be correct like this:
Bob sat in the main square, drinking a Coke. He took pleasure in watching the hordes of tourists and passersby, as well as the souvenir stalls, street vendors, buskers, and listening to the music pouring out of cafes and patisseries.
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