Bob sat in the main square

[Bassim]

Would you please correct the mistakes in my sentences?

Bob sat in the main square, drinking a Coke. He took pleasure in the hordes of tourists, passersby, souvenir stalls, street vendors, buskers, and the music pouring out of cafes and patisseries.

[teechar]

Bob sat in the main square, drinking a Coke. He took pleasure in watching the hordes of tourists and passersby, as well as the souvenir stalls, street vendors, buskers, and the music pouring out of cafes and patisseries.

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[emsr2d2]

I'm not sure where Bob is but in my experience in continental Europe, France in particular, they don't usually play music in patisseries.

[Bassim]

teechar,

I think that the word "watching" is redundant because the words describe what he sees: tourists, passersby, buskers...

[emsr2d2]

It's not redundant. You can't just "take pleasure in tourists etc". You take pleasure in an action.

[teechar]

I was going to say that it is not redundant, but emsr2d2 beat me to it.
In fact, I would even add "listening to" before "the music" in that sentence.

[Bassim]

So after you corrections, would my sentence be correct like this:

Bob sat in the main square, drinking a Coke. He took pleasure in watching the hordes of tourists and passersby, as well as the souvenir stalls, street vendors, buskers, and listening to the music pouring out of cafes and patisseries.