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    When I came out of the nightclub

    I am wondering if my sentences sound natural.

    When I came out of the noisy nightclub, my head was still throbbing with the deafening music. I took a cab, and when the drive asked me, "Where to?" I replied, "Anywhere away from this terrible racket."

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    Re: When I came out of the nightclub

    We usually say I took a cab when we are referring to a completed journey.

    Q: How did you get to the club?
    A: I took a cab.

    I suggest you change the verb, then, to hailed or flagged down or got in or something else.

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    Re: When I came out of the nightclub

    Here is my second try after jutfrank's suggestions:

    When I came out of the noisy nightclub, my head was still throbbing with the deafening music. I hailed a cab, and when the driver asked me, "Where to?" I replied, "Anywhere away from this terrible racket."

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    Re: When I came out of the nightclub

    I would say throbbing from the deafening music, to show that the throbbing was caused by the music.

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    Re: When I came out of the nightclub

    jutfrank,

    I have imagined that the music I listened to was still playing in my head. In that case, could I keep "with the deafening music"?

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    Re: When I came out of the nightclub

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    I have imagined that the music I listened to was still playing in my head. In that case, could I keep "with the deafening music"?
    Yes.

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