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    Please check my summary writing and help improve it.

    Sugars are popular in the processed food industry because they add taste,color and thickness to food products. The studies have shown that sugars can provide a source of energy. The body breaks down the sugar into simple forms that can be readily used in the body.But too much sugar can contribute to health problems like obesity and tooth disease.

    Having too much sugar is not the only reason for obesity or being overweight,but it does add to the amount of kilojoules in food. Eating too much of any food,without doing enough exercise,will cause you to become overweight.

    Governments in the United States and United Kingdom are waging a war on sugar in the interests of public health. Both countries claim that the overconsumption of sugar by much of the population is harmful to people’s health. On Thursday,the U.S. government issued new dietary guidelines that strongly recommend people receive less than 10 per cent of their daily calorie intake from added sugar. On the same day,British Prime Minister David Cameron said he has not ruled out the idea of a tax on sugar to encourage consumers to buy food with reduced levels of the sweet. Politicians in the U.K. are debating how a reduction in the intake of sugar could help reduce Britain’s rising rates of obesity.

    The American and British governments both refer to a study conducted in Mexico that showed a tax on sugary,carbonated drinks led to a reduction in consumption. The tax was carried out on January 1,2014 and purchases of the taxed drinks went down by 12 per cent by December of that year. Sales of mineral water increased by 4 per cent over the same period. An alternative to taxing sugared drinks is to reduce the level of sugar in them. Researchers at Queen Mary University in London say that reducing the sugar content in sugar-sweetened drinks by 40 percent over five years could prevent one million cases of obesity in the U.K. Researchers say people might not even notice the changes.

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    The task is: Please summarise the article above in your own words, using between 40 and 80 words.
    The following is just my attempt at summarising and I hope someone would proofread it and polish it. It serves as an example for my students to follow after I finish checking their summaries.
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    Sugar is useful for our body,but too much sugar would lead to physical illnesses. As for this,governments in the United States and United Kingdom call on people to take in less sugar daily. British Prime Minister even planned to put a tax on sugar. A study made in Mexico showed that the tax on sugar helped reduce the consumption of sugar. Researchers in London also suggest reducing the sugar content slightly would contribute to preventing obesity.

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    Re: Please check my summary writing and help improve it.

    Quote Originally Posted by rodgers white View Post
    Sugar is useful for our body,but too much sugar can cause health problems. would lead to physical illnesses. As for this, Thus, governments in the United States and the United Kingdom have called on people to take in consume less sugar. daily. The British Prime Minister has even planned to put/levy a tax on sugar. A study made done/conducted in Mexico showed that the such a tax on sugar helped can help reduce the consumption of sugar. Researchers in London also suggest reducing the sugar content in processed foods slightly would contribute to preventing obesity.
    Note that the main text does not seem natural and contains several mistakes.

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