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    Unemployment ..

    Introduction ..
    Unemployment in its general sense means not finding work for those looking for it , and the difnition of unemployment differs from state to state .

    Body ..

    The causes of unemployment are many :
    The first : is the population growth , which led to an increase in the number of graduates .

    Second : the lack of development of education as education is a major source in the production of minds .

    Third : Lack of expansion in government service facilities in cities and villages , despite the importance of this .


    Conclusion ..

    The problem of unemployment , as we explained earlier , is one of the most important problems facing our Arab societies , and the state must pay attention to it .


    Can you correct my essay?

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    Re: Unemployment ..

    Hello tareq-moshbb, and welcome to the forum.
    The text you posted does not qualify as a proper and complete essay. You have some good ideas there, but you need to write more.

    Take a look at my replies in the following thread, redraft your essay and post it again.

    https://www.usingenglish.com/forum/t...should-be-free

    What is the exact prompt for the essay you're trying to write?
    Last edited by teechar; 06-May-2017 at 12:40. Reason: inserted link

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    Re: Unemployment ..

    Tareq-mosheb, it looks like you tried to reply to teechar's post but you accidentally clicked on "Report Post" instead so your message went to a private area of the forum.

    Please post your reply again, making sure you click on the word "Reply" in the bottom right-hand corner before you write.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    #4

    Re: Unemployment ..

    It's an essay plan, not an essay. You have to write the essay before anyone can suggest corrections.

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