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    Please give review on my essay

    Some people think that strict punishment for driving offences are the key to reduce traffic accidents. Other, however, believe that other measures could be more efective in improving road safety. Disccuss both views and give your own opinion. It is common to believe that traffic lawbreakers should be sentenced to severe punishment, it is preferred solution to answer the high rank of traffic accidents. Other though, while, accept that constructing enchanced infrastructures to improve physical safety of road should exceed more positive impacts. I personally believe that bold decision to make proper punishment would be better to overcome this issue. It is general for highway to be equipped by traffic tools to ensure that users being comfort and safe. For instance, it is an obligation for local authority providing sufficient numbers of traffic signs particularly in area where it has more risks to crash. Those would be very helpful for public to be noticed when they are spotted in right place. In contrast, the warnings should cost much expense of budget while it continuously use in future because high numbers of signs do not identically reflect the success of traffic accidents reducing. On the other hand, user's attitude and behaviour would impact more benefits through serious law enforcement. This kind of measure could be executed by officers to sentence the offenders by equal punishment with no exception from all of groups. Furthermore, it would educate people to understand how essential the law is in daily life where it should accidentally build the sense of law awareness. When the awareness are maintaining, preferable attitude of driving would be being part of habitual tradition. Thus, citizens may contribute to create a harmony and to lead a firm obedience of official rules. To sum up, traffic rules breaking which causes more accidents should be tackled by firmly practical regulation for those offending. It is cost-effective and most suitable to vouch the rules would be obeyed by public.

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    Re: Please give review on my essay

    Hello mrfwijaya, and welcome to the forum.
    Quote Originally Posted by mrfwijaya View Post
    Some people think that strict punishment for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures could be more effective in improving road safety. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

    It is common to believe Many people are of the opinion that traffic lawbreakers offenses should carry strong penalties to be effective as a deterrent sentenced to severe punishment, it is preferred solution to answer in the face of the high rank rate of traffic accidents. Others, however, though, while, accept that constructing enchanced argue that building better roads and transport infrastructure is more likely to increase to improve physical the safety of motorists and pedestrians alike. road should exceed more positive impacts. I personally believe that bold decision to make proper strong punishment would be better is the more effective to overcome this very serious problem. issue.
    The rest of your text is not well written and difficult to follow.

    You need two/three body paragraphs to support your position. Please write in a clear, direct and simple manner. Start each paragraph with a topic sentence that defines the scope of the paragraph, followed by supporting and example sentences. That means the paragraph will follow a general-to-specific style.

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