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    Please correct my motivation letter

    Hello everybody. I need some help with my application letter for a internship in New Zealand. The letter is written to a woman thats going to help me find a intership. Anyway I really appreciate any opinion about the content and any review about grammar and spelling mistakes. Thanks you so much in advance.
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    Dear Ms Daffodil,

    My name is John Smith, 19 years old and I am a second-year student at University College XYX situated in Belgium. As part of the degree requirements, I must complete a 3-months internship in my third year.

    I am currently pursuing my Professional Bachelor in Applied informatics and at our University, we understand the importance of gaining practical knowledge which will complement the textbook knowledge and help a student gain a wider perspective of the subjects.

    Laden with textbook knowledge, I wish to implement the skills that I have learned, in the real world. What better way to prove that I have truly been benefited by this education, and what better place to start, than a country as New Zealand?

    Why studying abroad and why New Zealand? All my life I had parents to count on, had always clean clothes, fresh bedsheets and a healthy meal. Abroad I'm going to have the opportunity to be self-sufficient and independent, to see the things that I can achieve on my own. It will also give me a chance to lay new connections, improve my English and working in a different culture. New Zealand has a growing digital market with result a lot of young innovative companies.

    I look forward to hearing from you

    Yours sincerely,

    John Smith
    Last edited by teechar; 23-Apr-2017 at 22:00.

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    Re: Please kindly correct my motivation letter

    Quote Originally Posted by vincentne View Post
    Hello everybody. I need some help with my application letter for an internship in New Zealand. The letter is written to a woman that's going to help me find an internship. Anyway, I would really appreciate any opinion about the content and any a review about of the grammar. and spelling mistakes. Thank you so much in advance.
    Cheers!


    Dear Ms Daffodil,

    My name is John Smith, and I am 19 years old. and I am a second-year student at University College XYX situated in Belgium. As part of the degree requirements, I must complete a 3-month internship in my third year.

    I am currently pursuing my Professional studying for my Bachelor in Applied informatics, and at our university, we understand highly value the importance of gaining practical experience knowledge which will to complement the textbook theoretical knowledge and help a student gain a wider perspective of their subjects.

    Laden with textbook knowledge, Thus, I wish to have the opportunity to put into practice implement the skills that I have learned, , in the real world. and what better way to prove that I have truly been benefited by this education, and what better place to start, than a country as than New Zealand to consider?

    Why studying abroad and why New Zealand? All my life I had parents to count on, had always clean clothes, fresh bedsheets and a healthy meal. By studying abroad, I'm going to have the opportunity to be self-sufficient and independent, and to see the things that discover what I can achieve on my own. It will also give me a chance to lay make new connections, improve my English and work ing in a different culture. Moreover, New Zealand has a growing digital market with result a lot plenty of young innovative companies.

    I look forward to hearing from you.

    Yours sincerely,

    John Smith
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    Re: Please kindly correct my motivation letter

    Quote Originally Posted by KateBurton View Post
    Wow, what a nice motivation letter. Especially a the part (no comma here) when in which you explain about New Zealand.
    See above.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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