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    working on writing clear and precise.

    Write an introductory synopsis of the recent book you have read. (A writing work for practice on structure, grammar and tenses.)

    Recently, I have read xxxxx a book written by xxxxx.

    It is a story about a little girl and her journey. She was born in a large joint family in India. Being the first child of the second son of the family, she was very special to their parents, but, she was the third daughter in the family. The girl was not loved by anyone except the parents and grandfather. The family wanted a boy child; but, continue third time girl child was born. Everyone loved the eldest girl as the first child of the next generation; the second girl was ignored, and the third one was not even needed. As she grew older, she realised that the eldest cousin sister got everything she wanted however, she just got scolded and revile. Her parents were helpless as the leader of the family was grandmother who loved and listened only his eldest son and his wife which were not nice people.

    There were two geriatrics, seven adults, one teenage, and three kids in the family. The eldest member of the family were great-grandparents; the leaders of the family were grandparents. They had four sons in which two were married; the youngest son was in teenage. The eldest son had two daughters; the second son had one daughter too.

    The story is about the little girl's conflicts, dilemma and response towards different situations she faced in life.

    I am working on usage and structure.
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    Re: working on writing clear and precise.

    Quote Originally Posted by THOUGHTFUL View Post
    Write an introductory synopsis of the a recent book you have read. (A writing work for practice on structure, grammar and tenses.)
    Are you sure about that prompt? "A recent book" means a book that was published recently.


    Quote Originally Posted by THOUGHTFUL View Post
    Recently, I recently read Wind in the Willows by Kenneth Grahame. have read xxxxx a book written by xxxxx.


    The story book is about the a little girl's struggles, conflicts, dilemmas and response towards different situations she faces in life.

    It is a story about a little girl and her journey in life. She was born into a large joint family in India.

    There were two geriatrics, The family is made up of two very old people, seven middle-aged adults, one teenager, and three kids. in the family. The eldest members of the family were are the great-grandparents; the leaders heads of the family were are the grandparents. They had have four sons in which of whom two were are married; the youngest son was in is still a teenager. The eldest son had has two daughters; the second son had has one daughter too.

    Being the first child of the second son of the in that family, she was is very special to their parents, but she was is the third daughter in the family. The girl was is not loved by anyone except the her parents and grandfather. The family wanted were desperate for a boy, but they got their third daughter instead. child; but, continue third time girl child was born. Everyone loved the eldest girl as the first grandchild in the family; of the next generation; the second girl was mostly ignored, and the third one was not even needed. As she grew older, she realised that the her eldest cousin sister ["Cousin sister" may be acceptable in Indian English, but it's not elsewhere. I suggest you use "female cousin" instead.] got everything she wanted, however, whereas she just got scolded and reviled. Her parents were are helpless as the leader head of the family was is the grandmother who loves and listens to only his her eldest son and his wife which who were are not nice people.
    I don't understand the text in blue.

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