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    Two brothers fought each other in their room. Because of their fight everything got d

    Two brothers fought each other in their room. Because of their fight everything got distorted in the room. Tables and chairs were flipped and on the floor. But they restored everything before their parents came.

    Please check my sentences.

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    Re: Two brothers fought each other in their room. Because of their fight everything g

    Quote Originally Posted by tufguy View Post
    Two brothers fought each other in their room. Because of their fight everything got distorted in the room. Tables and chairs were flipped and on the floor. But they restored everything before their parents came (missing word).

    Please check my sentences.
    I have underlined the parts which need to be changed/improved. See if you can come up with better versions for each one.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Two brothers fought each other in their room. Because of their fight everything g

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    I have underlined the parts which need to be changed/improved. See if you can come up with better versions for each one.
    Two brothers fought each other in their room. Because of their fight everything got messed up in the room. Tables and chairs were crooked and on the floor. But they restored everything before their parents came back.

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    Re: Two brothers fought each other in their room. Because of their fight everything g

    Quote Originally Posted by tufguy View Post
    Two brothers fought each other in their room.
    Because of their fight everything got messed up in the room.

    Tables and chairs were crooked and on the floor. But they restored everything before their parents came back.
    The first two changes you made were OK. As you can see above, I have now underlined "crooked" and I have, for the second time, underlined the last letter of "floor", the full stop and the first letter of "But". Can you work out what error I am trying to point out there?
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    Re: Two brothers fought each other in their room. Because of their fight everything g

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    The first two changes you made were OK. As you can see above, I have now underlined "crooked" and I have, for the second time, underlined the last letter of "floor", the full stop and the first letter of "But". Can you work out what error I am trying to point out there?
    Tables and chairs were lain on the floor but they restored everything before their parents came back.

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    Re: Two brothers fought each other in their room. Because of their fight everything g

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    Tables and chairs were lain on the floor but they restored everything before their parents came back.
    You've corrected the punctuation. Well done.

    Now for the choice of verb for the tables and chairs. You could use "lying", but not lain; the latter would be the passive voice for "to lie", meaning someone had carefully set them in a prone position on the floor. But neither really works for tables and chairs. Try "strewn about", and leave off "the floor" which is, after all, the usual place for tables and chairs.
    Last edited by GoesStation; 03-May-2017 at 14:53. Reason: Argh! See post #7.
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    Re: Two brothers fought each other in their room. Because of their fight everything g

    'Lain' is the past participle of the verb 'to lie'.

    "I'm lying here upon the shore;
    I lie here every day.
    I've lain here many times before;
    I lay here yesterday.

    I'd lay my head upon the floor
    If you'd lie down by me.
    I've laid it there five times or more.
    (I lied ... it's only three.)"

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    Re: Two brothers fought each other in their room. Because of their fight everything g

    Quote Originally Posted by GoesStation View Post
    You've corrected the punctuation. Well done.

    Now for the choice of verb for the tables and chairs. You could use "lying", but not lain; the latter would be the passive voice for "to lie", meaning someone had carefully set them in a prone position on the floor. But neither really works for tables and chairs. Try "strewn about", and leave off "the floor" which is, after all, the usual place for tables and chairs.
    Tables and chairs were strewn about the floor. They restored everything before their parents came back. Is it correct now?

    "Leave off the floor" I couldn't understand this.

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    It's okay now.

    I didn't write "Leave off the floor". I wrote "Leave off 'the floor'". Do you see the difference? Leave off is a phrasal verb that means "omit".
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