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    #1

    adding detail using conjunctions or adverbs.

    hi teachers,
    If i want to add more detail to my previous sentence, which conjunction or adverb is more appropriate?


    For example
    : I work as a VoIP expert, which stands for voice over Internet protocol, in a computer firm. In fact or on the other hand I have been working in the Internet service provider for seven years in IT department.

    I am not sure my choices can be good ones.


    Please help me.

    Thanks.
    Last edited by ambitious-girl; 04-May-2017 at 06:24.

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    #2

    Re: adding detail using conjunctions or adverbs.

    Neither choice works well. I can't think of any natural filler words to use there - I'd just go on with the second sentence without any.
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    Re: adding detail using conjunctions or adverbs.

    Quote Originally Posted by GoesStation View Post
    Neither choice works well. I can't think of any natural filler words to use there - I'd just go on with the second sentence without any.
    Thank you so much.
    How about the revised versions?
    I have been working as a VoIP expert in the Internet service provider company for seven years in IT department.

    I have been working as a VoIP expert in IT department in the Internet service provider company for seven years.

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    Re: adding detail using conjunctions or adverbs.

    Not quite. Try I have been working as a VoIP expert in the IT department of an internet service provider for seven years.​ Can you think of another way to describe the job? "Expert" is not a term people normally apply to themselves, and doesn't tell the reader anything about what your actual duties were.
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    Re: adding detail using conjunctions or adverbs.

    I have been working as a VoIP expert in the IT department of an internet service provider for seven years.​
    Thanks so much.
    "Expert" is not a term people normally apply to themselves.

    Really? I didn't know about this term.

    Can you think of another way to describe the job?
    I don't know. I am not sure. What is an appropriate term?
    Is VoIP specialist OK?

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    Re: adding detail using conjunctions or adverbs.

    Quote Originally Posted by ambitious-girl View Post
    Is VoIP specialist OK?
    Yes, that's good.
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