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    Post dangers and risks drivers face

    As I stated above, I am trying to develop my English skills but they're saying that there are many grammar mistakes. I revised my grammar multiple times but I couldn't find anything. Can you help me please, thank you!


    • Because of my current job, Everyday I am traveling around the city while driving a bus or a tow truck and almost every day I see an incident which includes life threats, murders, robberies. It makes me feel uncomfortable. I am going to quote some of these incidents which I came across.

      I was driving my tow truck near to the East LS car wash then a guy with BMX just came up and told me there is an illegally parked car and he asked me to follow me. I started following him and he just drove to a building's backyard and quickly pulled out a gun and aimed at my face. He told me to leave my truck and lay down on the ground. I was shocked and didn't realize the things then I tried to push the panic alarm button before I got out but I failed. I stepped out of my truck and laid down on the floor. He hit to my neck with his gun's butt. Then I lost my mind for about a minute. He took my everything, my license, my camera, my phone. When he was done robbing me, he told me to count until one hundred then leave, and he added those words " If you attempt to call the police, I won't get you down, I will get your family down, Erdil " . I started crying after he was gone then I went inside my truck and reported to the police about the situation and I went to the hospital for a regular check.

      I just took a break that day and was walking around the city while eating an ice cream. It was a sunny and relaxable day until I heard faint sounds of shooting from the back street, I was scared but ran down there and I saw the shooter still in the area, when I saw the shooter he looked at me and at this time I attempted to run but he suddenly aimed his gun and shot me in the left arm. I ran from the scene while I am bleeding heavily, I entered to another street and I sat down on the ground. I called 911 and units came up, I told them about the scene, they went to check it and found a woman shot and dead also the shooter already left the scene when they arrived...

      I was on a shuttle duty which provides a free ride to the city from the airport. I was waiting for customers and three taxi drivers were waiting for customers too. One of them just got out of his taxi and opened up his taxi's trunk and grabbed a baseball bat. He came to me and told me to leave but I rejected to leave. Then he started insulting me. I was really scared that time and other taxi drivers there just joined him. I closed my window and tried to ignore him but I couldn't resist anymore and I left the area. After it, I called the police and they came up. They talked with the guy. The officer told me it's resolved. Then I continued my duty, just dropped a customer and I got back to the airport. I saw that guy again there, he was talking with his friend and I heard the conversation, they talked about taking me down when I'll leave the airport area. After a while, he got in his taxi and while he was taking a customer, I drove off from the scene and I saw he was holding a screwdriver in his left hand!

      I would like to say it is not only for me, for protecting other's life too. As like my passengers, I need to take care of them on my every duty. If something happens to one of them, I will be considered as the guilty. I am sure the CCW license will help me for living a better life.
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    Re: Hey there, I need help within my essay.

    Quote Originally Posted by ohcamper View Post
    As I stated above, I am trying to develop my English skills, but they're saying I'm told that there are my text still contains many grammar mistakes. I have revised my grammar multiple times, but I couldn't find anything. Can you help me please? Thank you!

    Because of my current job, Everyday I am traveling I travel every day around the city, while driving a bus or a tow truck, and almost every day, I come across some serious and scary see an incident(s) which includes life threats, murders, involves violence, robbery, or even murder. robberies. It That makes me feel uncomfortable. I am going to quote relate some of these incidents which I came across.

    I was driving my tow truck near to the East LS car wash [Are you sure this is the correct name?] then a guy with BMX just came up and told me there is an illegally parked car and he asked me to follow me [I don't understand that. Did he say you were illegally parked?]. I started following him, and he just drove to a building's backyard and quickly pulled out a gun and which he aimed at my face. He told me to leave my truck and lay lie down on the ground. I was shocked and didn't realize the things then what was happening, so I tried to push the panic alarm button before I got out, but I failed. I stepped out of my truck and laid lay down on the floor. He hit to my me in the neck with the butt of his gun. 's butt. Then I lost my mind passed out for about a minute. He took all my belongings, including everything, my license, my camera, my and phone. When he was done robbing me, he told me to count until to one hundred then leave, and he added those words "If you attempt try to call the police, I won't just get you, down, I will get your family too, down, Erdil." [Is that your name? If so, how does he know that?] I started crying after he was gone, then I went inside my truck and reported the incident to the police. about the situation and Afterwards, I went to the hospital for a regular checkup.

    On another occasion, I just took had taken a break that day and was walking around the city while eating an ice cream. It was a sunny and relaxing able day until I heard faint sounds of shooting from the some back street. I was scared, but I ran down there and I saw the shooter still in the area. when I saw the shooter He looked at me and at this time I attempted to run, but he suddenly aimed his gun and shot me in the my left arm. I ran from the scene while I am was bleeding heavily. I entered to another street and sat down on the ground. I called 911, and units the police and an ambulance came. up, I told them about what had happened, and the scene, they went to check it and found a woman who had been shot and dead. also The shooter had already left the scene when they arrived.

    Another day, I was on shuttle duty which provides a free ride to the city from the airport. I was waiting for customers and three taxi drivers were waiting for customers too. One of them just got out of his taxi and opened up his taxi's trunk and grabbed a baseball bat. He came to me and told me to leave, but I refused. rejected to leave. Then he started insulting shouting abuse at me. I was felt really scared, that time and the other taxi drivers there just joined him. I closed my window and tried to ignore him, but I couldn't resist anymore and I left the area. Afterwards, it, I called the police and they arrived. came up. They talked with the guy, and the officer told me they'd sorted it out. it's resolved. Then I continued my duty, just dropped off a customer and got back to the airport. I saw that guy again there. He was talking with his friend, and I heard the conversation. They talked about taking me down when I leave the airport area. After a while, he got in his taxi and while he was taking picking up a customer, I drove off. from the scene and I saw he was holding a screwdriver in his left hand and waving it at me!

    I would like to say it is am concerned not only for my own safety, me, but for the safety of other people protecting other's life too. As a professional driver, like my passengers, I need to take care of their safety and well-being. them on my every duty. If something happens to any of my passengers, one of them, I will be held responsible. considered as the guilty. I am sure the CCW license will help me for living a better life. [I don't understand that.]
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