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    A journalist working undercover in the hospital

    I am wondering if my sentence sounds natural.

    A journalist, working undercover in the hospital, discovered that on a few occasions during the nights patients cried for help without being attended to by the nurses.

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    Re: A journalist working undercover in the hospital

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    I am wondering if my sentence sounds natural.

    A journalist, working undercover in the hospital, discovered that on a few occasions during the nights sometimes, during the night, patients cried called for help without being attended to by the nurses. but no one came.
    See above for what I consider to be a more natural version. The commas at the start are optional but I would leave them in to break up what would otherwise be a very long pause-free sentence.

    You could start with "An undercover journalist at the hospital ..."
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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