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    #1

    Benn lay in darkness

    I am wondering if my sentence sounds natural. I am not sure about the phrase "coming up and trailing off" I used. I wanted to say that the sounds were appearing and disappearing in the distance.

    Benn lay in darkness, his arms under his head, listening to the sounds of voices and music coming up and trailing off from the party down the street.

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    #2

    Re: Benn lay in darkness

    I would use "reverberating" in place of your phrase. Better yet, just use "coming from the party..."

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    #3

    Re: Benn lay in darkness

    I am wondering what phrase could you use to describe the sound coming up and disappearing at intervals.

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    #4

    Re: Benn lay in darkness

    I could suggest fading in and out, or possibly coming and going.

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    #5

    Re: Benn lay in darkness

    Quote Originally Posted by andrewg927 View Post
    I would use "reverberating" in place of your phrase. Better yet, just use "coming from the party..."
    Reverberate has a rather different meaning from the fading in and out idea that Bassim wants to present. Your second suggestion misses the fading part.

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    #6

    Re: Benn lay in darkness

    Quote Originally Posted by Piscean View Post
    Reverberate has a rather different meaning from the fading in and out idea that Bassim wants to present. Your second suggestion misses the fading part.
    All of this is my own opinion. You have the right to disagree. I said I would use the word because I think it sounds better than the phrase the student chose. I never said it meant the exact same thing.

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