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    Correctness of a phrase in lyrics for a song

    Hello everyone,

    Here a question about the correctness of a phrase which is meant for the lyrics in a song. Not being a native English speaker, I'm in a doubt which of these phrases is perfectly correct/incorrect in English:

    1. "Do you dream in colors or you dream in black and white?"

    2. "Do you dream in colors or dream in black and white?'

    (Meaning: "your dreams are they in colors or in black and white?")

    Or if that's ambiguous, then wouldn't it be better to put it:

    3. "Do you dream in colors or it is in black and white?"

    Or any other suggestions?

    Thanks for your feedback and best vibes !
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    Re: Correctness of a phrase in lyrics for a song

    This would be most typical: "Do you dream in color or [in] black and white?" Note that "color" is singular and the second "in" is optional.

    If you need more syllables, you can use number 2 provided you change "colors" to "color".
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    Re: Correctness of a phrase in lyrics for a song

    Quote Originally Posted by GoesStation View Post
    This would be most typical: "Do you dream in color or [in] black and white?" Note that "color" is singular and the second "in" is optional.

    If you need more syllables, you can use number 2 provided you change "colors" to "color".
    Yes, I need more syllables. And in fact, for rhyming purposes, 'colors' needs to be in plural to rhyme with 'horrors'. Here's my whole verse (corrected as suggested):


    "Do you dream in colors,
    or dream in black and white?
    'Cause all joys and horrors
    they run through day and night."


    Or, instead of that, couldn't I use:
    "Do you dream in colors,
    or is it in black and white?" ??
    Last edited by BadDisciple; 25-May-2017 at 10:11. Reason: I made a mistake

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    Re: Correctness of a phrase in lyrics for a song

    The plural colors works fine there. It's okay to stretch a little here and there in lyrics.

    The version with "is it in black and white" would be okay by the same logic, but I think it sounds clumsy and rather like something written by a non-native English speaker. Stick with the first version.
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