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    andrewg927 is offline Senior Member
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    Re: Ben went into a restaurant to have a quiet dinner

    If you want to speak, write and read like a native English speaker, why are you reading articles by an Indian writer? The sentence was badly written to me. I mean BADLY. You should be reading the NY Times and the likes.

    It sounds like your vocabulary is still limited. That is why you need to use a dictionary all the time. It is not something that can be done overnight. You just need to keep learning new words until you no longer need to use a dictionary on a daily basis.

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    Re: Ben went into a restaurant to have a quiet dinner

    There is too much information in one sentence. That sentence should be broken into 2 or 3 sentences.

    Besides, I don't find "many representations were made" particularly natural. It would be better as "many complaints were made".

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    andrewg927 is offline Senior Member
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    Re: Ben went into a restaurant to have a quiet dinner

    Because the sentence is so condensed, there are some clarity issues as well. Like what did the writer mean by institutions? and a less important question of why the entire journal was blacklisted because of one bad writer. It could be a cultural thing that I'm not aware of but I think good writing shouldn't obscure clarity over theatrical effects.

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