[Grammar] Kevin walked down the street, looking at the ground

[Nikitus]

Hello.

Are the following sentences grammatically correct?

Kevin walked down the street, looking at the ground and mumbling strange words to himself. He was wearing a white shirt, old white sports pants and black espadrilles. He put his old radio on the bench and then started to dance to the rhythm of instrumental music, executing miscellaneous movements. Then, Kevin ran to the right and a few meters later stopped and bent down, gracefully shifting his weight from his right leg to his left leg. Finally he raised his right arm, pointing with his index finger to the sky.

After that he ran and jump right into the middle of the highway, where a car almost ran over him. Marl followed Kevin with the camera, recording everything.

Thanks.

 

[teechar]

Kevin walked down the street, looking at the ground and mumbling strange words to himself. He was wearing a white shirt, old white sports pants and black espadrilles. He put his old radio on [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] a bench and [STRIKE]then[/STRIKE] started [STRIKE]to[/STRIKE] dancing to the rhythm of instrumental music, executing miscellaneous movements. Then, Kevin ran to the right and, after a few meters, [STRIKE]later[/STRIKE] stopped and bent down, gracefully shifting his weight from his right leg to his left leg. Finally, he raised his right arm, pointing with his index finger to the sky.

After that, he ran and jumped right into the middle of the highway, where a car almost ran over him. Marl followed Kevin with the camera, recording everything.

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