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    Correction to request letter for training course

    Hello
    This is my letter please check it and correct it if possible

    I'm xxxxxx,
    I have BSCs Degree in xxxii from xxxii university.
    I have great interest to request an admission for a training course in your prestigious university faculty of laboratory sciences department of haematology.
    I would really appreciate that if you offer me a three month training course and I would be able to spend the full day working hours.
    I found out about your training course through a friend of mine who works at your institute.
    Training in your reputed university would provide me an opportunity to increase my knowledge, improve my skills and definitly boost my career prospect.
    I'm willing to apply for this course because it's honor to me to educate in "name of university". university which is one of successful Arab university and also I'm so interested because I'm resident in "Country" and can easily obtain a visa to enter "Country of university", also because my family resident in "Country of university", so accommodation will not be a problem.
    I give you my assurance that through the internship program I would work with my sincere dedication , respect the senior and don't harm the instruments.
    Below are my contact details and mailing address for correspondence.
    Thanks for your time and effort to consideration my letter.
    I'm looking forward to receiving you reply...
    Last edited by Jamila2; 06-Jun-2017 at 10:41.

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    Re: Correction to request letter for training course

    Quote Originally Posted by Jamila2 View Post
    Hello,
    This is my letter. Please check it and correct it if possible.
    Your letter is a little short and not very clear. What do you mean by "training course"? Are you applying for a specific course? If so, you need to use the exact course name.

    You also refer to an internship program; what does that mean?

    I also don't know what "don't harm the instruments" means. I think you may be using an online translator; if so, that doesn't work!

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    Re: Correction to request letter for training course

    Hello

    I don't apply for a specific course just I want to do training.

    Internship program is another word means training program as I know.

    Regarding "don't harm instruments" this point specifically I couldn't how to say it and I didn't use online translation, I want to give them insurances to save the equipment inside the lab.

    Please kindly I ask you to show me the perfect way to say that and how to make my letter very strong and convincing.
    Last edited by Jamila2; 06-Jun-2017 at 09:57.

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    #4

    Re: Correction to request letter for training course

    I didn't find the writing letter sub forum.

    I'm sorry to post it here

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    Re: Correction to request letter for training course

    Quote Originally Posted by Jamila2 View Post
    Hello

    I don't apply for a specific course just I want to do training.

    Internship program is another word means training program as I know.
    So are you looking to do a three-month internship? If so, in which department/faculty?

    Quote Originally Posted by Jamila2 View Post
    Regarding "don't harm instruments" this point specifically I couldn't how to say it and I didn't use online translation, I want to give them insurances to save the equipment inside the lab.
    Okay, I kind of understand that.

    Quote Originally Posted by Jamila2 View Post
    Please kindly I ask you to show me the perfect way to say that and how to make my letter very strong.
    If you provide more details (write more words), your letter will become clearer and will make more sense.

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    Red face Re: Correction to request letter for training course

    Thank you for quick response..
    I edited the same letter here to be more clear.

    I am waiting for your reply

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    Re: Correction to request letter for training course

    Jamila, be patient. We are all volunteers here. We will get to your post when we're ready.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Correction to request letter for training course

    OK, thanks .
    I'm sorry for that and I appreciate your work

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    Re: Correction to request letter for training course

    Did you read my questions/comments in post #5?

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    Re: Correction to request letter for training course

    I think Jamila added the information about the faculty/department (by editing post #1) as a result of your first comment in post #5. I didn't see the original version of post #1 so I'm not sure what other edits might have been made.

    Jamila, for future reference, please don't edit the first post of your threads after people have posted responses. It can make the responses confusing and nonsensical. If you're asked to rewrite something or add more information, please do so in a new response.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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