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    When her father died

    I am wondering if my sentence is grammatically correct.

    When her father died, Maria moved to her sister, a wealthy woman who lived in a mansion-like house and bred horses on her estate.

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    Re: When her father died

    She would move to her sister's house, a mansion.
    I am not a teacher.

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    Re: When her father died

    GoesStation,
    I am wondering if I could omit "house" and write like this:

    When her father died, Maria moved to her sister's, a wealthy woman who lived in a mansion-like house and bred horses on her estate.

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    Re: When her father died

    You could, but not like that. Your phrase "a wealthy woman..." is attempting to modify "sister," but is actually modifying "sister's (house)."

    Try "...Maria moved to her sister's. She was a wealthy woman..."

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    Re: When her father died

    ... Maria went to live with her sister, a wealthy woman...

    (Realize that we are talking about Maria's sister here. Was the father not the sister's father too? After their father died, Maria moved to live with her sister, ...)
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    Re: When her father died

    You can say "moved in with her sister".

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