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    When Bob left home after

    I am wondering if my sentence is grammatically correct.

    When Bob left home after a violent argument with his parents, he knew he wasn't going back. The scene played like on a loop in his mind decades after it occurred.

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    Re: When Bob left home after

    There are two sentences and they are both grammatical.
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    Re: When Bob left home after

    The second sentence is not well phrased. I suggest you reword it.

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    Re: When Bob left home after

    Would this version of my second sentence be OK?

    The scene played in his mind like on a loop, decades after it had occurred.

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    Re: When Bob left home after

    You could write like a tape loop or as if it were on a loop.​ I don't much like the latter but I find it more acceptable than "like on a loop", which doesn't work at all for me.
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