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    During contacts held with Western European countries...

    During contacts held with Western European countries in which our citizens densely live, it was pointed out that policy makers and media should refrain from statements and attitudes that would exacerbate xenophobia, discrimination and Islamophobia. It was stated that governments should never turn their counter terrorism operations into a war against Muslims, trust between immigrants and societies in which they live should be improved and education system should be regulated such that young generations are correctly taught about Islam, Muslims and the phenomenon of migration.

    Can you please check the English above?

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    Re: During contacts held with Western European countries...

    We don't "hold contacts with" anyone/anything so your opening doesn't work. Try to rewrite the first seven words.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: During contacts held with Western European countries...

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    We don't "hold contacts with" anyone/anything so your opening doesn't work. Try to rewrite the first seven words.
    Would the verb make fit there?

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    Re: During contacts held with Western European countries...

    I wouldn't use in which our citizens densely live. How about with many Turkish citizens, with a high proportion of Turkish citizens/residents.

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    Re: During contacts held with Western European countries...

    Quote Originally Posted by angelsrolls View Post
    During contacts meetings held with government representatives from Western European countries in which our citizens densely significant numbers of Turkish citizens live, it was pointed out that policy makers and the media should be encouraged to refrain from making statements and adopting attitudes that would exacerbate xenophobia, discrimination and Islamophobia. It was stated that governments should never turn their counter-terrorism operations into a war against Muslims, that trust between immigrants and the societies in which they live should be improved and education systems should be regulated such that young generations are correctly taught about Islam, Muslims and the phenomenon of migration.
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