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    The thug hit the publican a couple of times on the head

    I am wondering if my sentences are grammatically correct.

    The thug hit the publican a couple of times on the head with a baseball bat, which just bounced off without causing him any harm. Then the publican shot his right fist into the thug's chin, sending him flying to the floor.

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    Re: The thug hit the publican a couple of times on the head

    I would say "but the publican wasn't injured" instead of "which just bounced off without causing him any harm."

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    Re: The thug hit the publican a couple of times on the head

    teechar,
    Thank you for your correction. I used "bounce off" to describe how strong the publican was. I think that it if I wrote "but the publican wasn't injured", my sentence would not describe the publican's strength. But if I wrote that the bat bounced off his head, the reader gets the exact picture of the incident.

    Would the following sentence be correct, without using "without causing him any harm"?

    The thug hit the publican a couple of times on the head with a baseball bat, which just bounced off him.

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    Re: The thug hit the publican a couple of times on the head

    That's okay.

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    Re: The thug hit the publican a couple of times on the head

    Do people really have heads so hard that being hit twice with a baseball bat has no effect at all? That seems really unlikely.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: The thug hit the publican a couple of times on the head

    It is not unlikely. If a man who is 165cm and weights 60 kg hits a person who is 190cm and weighs 120kg he can't hit him hard enough to hurt him, even if he wants. I have seen people in a prison camp being hit dozens of times by a prison guard in all parts of their bodies and they still stand. Why do you think boxers spend hours and hours sparring? It is one thing to hit someone who had never before boxed or was involved in a fight, and a completely different thing to pick up a fight with a former boxer or someone who is used to fight. In a film, even a little girl can knock a burly man, but a in a real fight, she would certainly end up in hospital, simply because her little body can't produce so much power to knock a strong person.

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    Re: The thug hit the publican a couple of times on the head

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    I am wondering if my sentences are grammatically correct.

    The thug hit the publican a couple of times on the head with a baseball bat, which just bounced off without causing him any harm. Then the publican shot his right fist into the thug's chin, sending him flying to the floor.
    Hey Bassim, did you write these sentences or did you find them somewhere?

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    Re: The thug hit the publican a couple of times on the head

    Unless the baseball bat is made of rubber, your sentence just doesn't work.

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    Re: The thug hit the publican a couple of times on the head

    Maybe he didn't hit him very hard, but then he wouldn't be a true thug.

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    Re: The thug hit the publican a couple of times on the head

    Perhaps, the thug just tapped the man with a baseball bat. That would make perfect sense.

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