an e-mail to professor

[acfun]

to whom it may concerned, this is an e-mail written by me who wants to send to my prof. would you mind to point out the grammar error inside? thanks a lot

The time I spent in waterloo is the best journey in my life, and I’m sorely miss there.( would this be better if I write" the journey in waterloo is sorely missed." ?) In UW, the warm-heart Canadian helped me in every aspect. Everytime I looked backwards, I’m so grateful for everything you have done for me, especially you granted me to your class and give me tireless guidance in my career.
After I came back to home, I spent some time in traveling in some country like Thailand and Indonesia. The view there is fantastic. Besides, I took the entrance test of the graduate school.
Now I’m applying the University of Edinburgh. This school is not bad respectfully, so they hope applicants have reference letters from a hand of wise scholar with high reputation. I mean I can’t find anyone more fit this standard than you sir. If I can get your refer, I think that couldn’t have gone any better.

[teechar]

to whom it may concerned, this is an e-mail written by me who wants to send to my prof. would you mind to point out the grammar error inside? thanks a lot

The time I spent in Waterloo is was the best journey period in my life, and I’m I sorely miss being there. In UW, the warm-hearted Canadian people helped me in every aspect. Every time I look back, looked backwards, I’m so grateful for everything you have done for me, especially you granted me to having me in your class and giving me tireless valuable guidance in for my career.

After I came back to home, I spent some time in traveling in some country countries like Thailand and Indonesia. The view nature there is fantastic. Besides, I took the entrance test of the for graduate school.

Now I’m applying for the University of Edinburgh. This school is not bad respectfully, so they hope require that applicants have provide reference letters from a hand of wise scholar with high reputation. Thus, I would be very grateful if you could provide such a letter for me. I mean I can’t find anyone more fit this standard than you sir. If I can get your refer, I think that couldn’t have gone any better.

I don't understand the parts in blue.