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    Kevin sat across the street of the building

    Hello.

    Are the following sentences grammatically correct?

    "Kevin sat across the street of the building. He was writing down some ideas in his copybook. Suddenly we woke up and put on his backpack, and walking in direction to the abandoned warehouses near the port of the city. Once inside there, he dressed for his ritual. First he put his old white sports pant and his black espadrilles. Then he put a white t-shirt and finally, he put a kind of chatin like the ancient greeks. Kevin puts play in his old radio and a few seconds later, instrumental music began."


    Thanks.

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    Re: Kevin sat across the street of the building

    1. Do you mean "Kevin sat across the street from the building"? That means he was probably sitting opposite the building or, at the very least, he was sitting on the other side of the road (not the same side of the road as the building).

    2. If he was writing in a book, we can assume he was awake. How can he then have suddenly woken up?

    3. He walked in the direction of the warehouses.

    4. Use "the city port" or just "the port".

    5. Use "Once there" or "Once inside", but not both.

    6. We put on clothes and shoes.

    7. It's pants.

    8. I have no idea what a chatin is.

    9. You need to capitalise "Greeks".

    10. We turn on or switch on a radio.
    Last edited by emsr2d2; 22-Jun-2017 at 17:17.
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    Re: Kevin sat across the street of the building

    Dear emsr2d2: Once again, thanks for all your help and time.

    "Kevin sat on the street near of the building. He was writing down some ideas in his copybook. Suddenly we stood up and put on his backpack, and walked in the direction to the abandoned warehouses near the port. Once inside, he dressed for his ritual. First he put on his old white sports pants and his black espadrilles. Then he put a white t-shirt and finally, he put a kind of tunic like the ancient greeks. Kevin turned on his his old radio and a few seconds later, instrumental music began."

    Thanks,

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    Re: Kevin sat across the street of the building

    Quote Originally Posted by Nikitus View Post
    Dear emsr2d2: Once again, thanks for all your help and time.

    "Kevin sat on the street near of the building. He was writing down some ideas in his copybook. Suddenly we stood up and put on his backpack, and walked in the direction to the abandoned warehouses near the port. Once inside, he dressed for his ritual. First he put on his old white sports pants and his black espadrilles. Then he put a white t-shirt and finally, he put a kind of tunic like the ancient greeks. Kevin turned on his his old radio and a few seconds later, instrumental music began."

    Thanks,
    1. If he sat on the street, he was not sitting on a chair or a bench, he was actually sitting directly on the road/street surface. That seems like a bad idea - he'll get hit by a car!

    2. Don't say "near of the building". Just use "near the building".

    3. I don't think you meant "we stood up".

    4. I already told you that it's "in the direction of the warehouses".

    5. You correctly used "put on" with "pants/espadrilles". However, you just used "put" with "white t-shirt" and "tunic".

    6. You failed to capitalise "Greeks" again.

    7. Put a comma before "a few seconds later".

    8. You have put a comma after "Thanks". It should be a full stop.
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    Re: Kevin sat across the street of the building

    Change 'copybook' to 'notebook'. [link]

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    Re: Kevin sat across the street of the building

    Dear emsr2d2 and Rover_KE

    Once again, thanks fot all your help and time.


    "Kevin sat on the bench near the building. He was writing down some ideas in his notebook. Suddenly he stood up and put on his backpack, and walked in the direction of the abandoned warehouses near the port. Once inside, he dressed for his ritual. First he put on his old white sports pants and his black espadrilles. Then he puts a white t-shirt and finally a kind of tunic like the ancient Greeks. Kevin turned on his his old radio and, a few seconds later, instrumental music began."




    Thanks.

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    Re: Kevin sat across the street of the building

    Quote Originally Posted by Nikitus View Post
    Dear emsr2d2 and Rover_KE

    Once again, thanks for all your help and time.


    "Kevin sat on the bench near the building. He was writing down some ideas in his notebook. Suddenly he stood up and put on his backpack, and walked in the direction of the abandoned warehouses near the port. Once inside, he dressed for his ritual. First he put on his old white sports pants and his black espadrilles. Then he puts a white t-shirt and finally a kind of tunic like the ancient Greeks. Kevin turned on his his old radio and, a few seconds later, instrumental music began."

    Thanks.
    Really, Nikitus?! For the third time, we put on​ clothes and shoes.
    Last edited by Rover_KE; 23-Jun-2017 at 09:12. Reason: Changing 'fot' to 'for'.
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    Re: Kevin sat across the street of the building

    Dear emsr2d2:

    Once again, thanks for your help.

    Sorry for the repetitive mistake. I will be more focus the next time.

    Best Regards.

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    Re: Kevin sat across the street of the building

    Quote Originally Posted by Nikitus View Post
    Dear emsr2d2:

    Once again, thanks for your help.

    Sorry for the repetitive mistake. I will be more focused the next time.

    Best regards.
    Don't apologise! Do fix the sentence with the error.
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    Re: Kevin sat across the street of the building

    Dear emsr2d2:

    Once again, thanks for your help.

    Sorry for the repetitive mistake. I will be more focused the next time.

    Best regards.

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