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    Bassim is offline VIP Member
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    Just as hopes faded

    I am not sure if my sentences are grammatically correct or if they sound natural. Would you please correct my mistakes?

    Just as hopes faded that a lost child would ever be found, a group of shepherds accidentally came across him. He was dehydrated and confused but otherwise in good health.

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    Re: Just as hopes faded

    Use "the lost child". It's clear that it is a specific child who is lost. You don't really need "accidentally". That's implied in "came across him".
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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