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    My Ideal Role Model

    My Ideal Role Model


    Where name is, there comes out the true amazing side of humanity. Name plays a powerful part in modeling good behavior. He possesses a set of character traits worthy of emulation: Name’s word is his bond. He is able to cope well with the pressures of life, relying solely on his own patience and diligent perseverance to thrive. Besides, his ambition has no limits. Having said that, he neither uses his achievements for reference, nor does he think highly of himself.


    He (also) treats everyone with human dignity, and he has a great respect for other people’s privacy better than anyone else. He doesn’t like to talk about anyone behind their back, and he never mocks, teases, or fools people. He doesn’t put pressure on anyone to do what they don’t want to do. He is nice, always avoiding hurting anyone’s feelings. He cares about and listens to what other people have to say. To build strong relationships with people, he never argues to win; rather, he wants to learn and strength connections. For years, name has been supportive, and committed to build a better me. Besides, he derives genuine satisfaction from helping the poor. Name is one of a million.


    Name
    was, and still is, the sort of man that I really hope to develop into—a decent human being and really a great man.



    Would you let me know if I have made any mistakes?
    Last edited by Odessa Dawn; 01-Jul-2017 at 19:33. Reason: Changing a real name to the word 'name'.

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    Re: My Ideal Role Model

    Where did you get the prompt for the above text from?

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    Re: My Ideal Role Model

    Hi teechar;


    Previous threads, Google, and frazeit.

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    Re: My Ideal Role Model

    Also, https://www.quora.com/, https://ell.stackexchange.com/, and https://forum.wordreference.com/. I was supposed to check http://corpus.byu.edu/coca/, but I failed. Should I pay them?

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    Re: My Ideal Role Model

    Quote Originally Posted by Odessa Dawn View Post
    Should I pay them?
    I have no idea what you're talking about!
    That prompt (title) doesn't seem very natural to me. Why did you decide to write that text?

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    Re: My Ideal Role Model

    Should I pay American Corpus?

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    Re: My Ideal Role Model

    How do I go about the 'title'? Would you help?

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    Re: My Ideal Role Model

    I wrote that text to show the recipient my appreciation.

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    Re: My Ideal Role Model

    Much of it is quite unnatural; I suggest you cut out the waffle and be more direct. Also, should you not write it in the second person if you're sending it to him?

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    Re: My Ideal Role Model

    Three tips that might help me write my letter:

    1 Introduce your role model to your audience.
    2 Talk about how applying some of their characters help you get better.
    3 Encouraging others to find and follow their own role model.

    I will follow those tips. But they are not mine.

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