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    I wonder whether "their determination to study gets weakened" is natural

    During summer vocation, school kids engage in a variety of funny plays. But here's the catch: they should play well, sleep well, lest their determination to study well get weakened.

    (The sentence is made by me to see whether it is natural English. The question is whether "lest their determination to study well get weakened" sounds natural in English.
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    Re: I wonder whether "their determination to study gets weakened" is natural

    No, it doesn't.
    “Every miserable fool who has nothing at all of which he can be proud, adopts as a last resource pride in the nation to which he belongs; he is ready and happy to defend all its faults and follies tooth and nail, thus reimbursing himself for his own inferiority.”

    — Arthur Schopenhauer

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    Re: I wonder whether "their determination to study gets weakened" is natural

    Quote Originally Posted by bhaisahab View Post
    No, it doesn't.
    Thanks. How to improve it then?

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    Re: I wonder whether "their determination to study gets weakened" is natural

    Quote Originally Posted by GoodTaste View Post
    During summer vacation, school kids engage in a variety of funny fun plays activities. But here's the catch: they should play well, sleep well, lest their determination to study well get weakened weakens.

    (I made up the sentence is made by me to see whether it is natural English. The question is whether "lest their determination to study well get weakened" sounds natural in English. It doesn't. See above.
    Quote Originally Posted by GoodTaste View Post
    Thanks. How to can I improve it then?
    See my corrections above.

    Kids don't "engage in funny plays". A "funny play" is a humorous theatre performance. Look up the definition of "funny" and "play" (noun). I don't know what you mean by "play well" and "sleep well", nor do I see the connection between that and their determination to study.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: I wonder whether "their determination to study gets weakened" is natural

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    See my corrections above.

    Kids don't "engage in funny plays". A "funny play" is a humorous theatre performance. Look up the definition of "funny" and "play" (noun). I don't know what you mean by "play well" and "sleep well", nor do I see the connection between that and their determination to study.
    Kids love fun activities. Yet too much activities and less sleep would make them tired. With the result that they would have less energy to study.

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    Re: I wonder whether "their determination to study gets weakened" is natural

    Quote Originally Posted by GoodTaste View Post
    Kids love fun activities yet but too much many activities and less too little sleep would make them tired, with the result that they would have less energy to study.
    See above.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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