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    Post Visualising My Room - Daily English Writing Practice

    I immersed myself into the room I am sitting. I visualised things like having beds, lizards hiding under paintings, sofa, and beds, but at the same time I didn’t notice couldn't imagine the desktop computer, a pair of telephone sets, and a trigonometry chart pasted on wall by my sister.

    The desktop computer is just in the right-side corner near to window opening toward lawn. It has all peripherals placed side by side on the table. A pair of digital phones are also on table but on different corners. One of them is wireless and black whereas other one is white and has wired connection in a socket. I didn’t realise that there is a trigonometry chart in the room. It is multicolour, written in bold. One can easily remember the conversions of different values from one another. Whenever I see the chart, I remember of my school days.

    I wish I have visualised all of these things before.

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    Please check, comment, and help me to improve my writing (strictly in British English).

    Last edited by bozdar; 28-Jul-2017 at 09:10. Reason: Self-editing
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    Re: Visualising My Room - Daily English Writing Practice

    I imagine myself sitting in a room with....
    I don't think you would go to great lengths to describe things that you "didn't notice".
    I am not a teacher or a native speaker.

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    Red face Re: Visualising My Room - Daily English Writing Practice

    Quote Originally Posted by tedmc View Post
    I don't think you would go to great lengths to describe things that you "didn't notice".
    Thanks for the signal, I corrected that part. I feel I am really learning to write better.
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    Re: Visualising My Room - Daily English Writing Practice

    Does this piece of writing contain no error?

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