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    an umbrella

    Are these sentences good as they stand or do i have to improve them?

    In most countries, people would consider you gay for carrying an umbrella for sun protection as a male. Not so in Manila, where it's seen as normal behaviour.

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    Re: an umbrella

    It's better to say that it would be considered "effeminate," than "gay."

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    Re: an umbrella

    In the 21st century, most people don't think that men are gay based on their behaviour, nor do they care whether other people are gay.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: an umbrella

    "In the 21st century, most people don't think that men are gay based on their behaviour ..."

    There are some behaviours which tend to be indicative, such as having sex with other men.

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    Re: an umbrella

    There are some behaviours which tend to be indicative, such as having sex with other men.
    Ha ha! Fair point. I was thinking more along the lines of behaviour you're likely to see people exhibiting in public! Attitudes are, thankfully, changing. Not so long ago, a man using moisturiser would have been assumed to be gay. Nowadays, most people realise that's nonsense.
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    Re: an umbrella

    Quote Originally Posted by AirbusA321 View Post
    Are these sentences good as they stand or do i have to improve them?

    In most countries, people would consider you gay for carrying an umbrella for sun protection as a male. Not so in Manila, where it's seen as normal behaviour.
    I won't comment on the social consequences of your sentence, but rather your sentence itself.

    I would remove the first comma.

    In most countries people would consider (that) you (are) gay, for....

    Personally I would add those bracketed implied words for clarity.

    I would change "as a male" to "if you are male". "You" could be female if you write the sentence your way... you don't know. They could just be carrying the umbrella in a male fashion. I would also place this phrase in the front of the sentence.

    This is how I would write the sentence.


    If you are male, in most countries people would consider that you are gay for carrying an umbrella for sun protection.
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