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    lovemusic1211 is offline Newbie
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    The Gaon Music Chart

    Hi everyone,
    Please help to fix any grammar mistakes to the sentence below. There is still something that does not sound right to me, but can't figure out what. Thank you.

    For the year 2015, the Gaon Music Chart announced that Girls' Generation was the overall most successful girl group of South Korea, with the release of their ''Lion Heart'' along with two other albums by subgroup TTS and member Taeyeon, respectively, having sold a combined total of over 398,000 physical copies.



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    Re: Is this sentence grammatically correct?

    The sentence is far too long.
    Also, was the announcement made with the release of their "Lion Heart" album?
    Were the TTS album and the Taeyeon album released 'along with' the "Lion Heart" album? Why are you using 'respectively' here?

    "The Gaon Music Chart announced that Girls' Generation was the most successful girl group of South Korea for 2015. The year saw the release of their ''Lion Heart'' album plus two other albums, by subgroup TTS and member Taeyeon. Together, the three albums sold over 398,000 physical copies."
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    Re: The Gaon Music Chart

    lovemusic, who wrote the quoted sentence?

    Please note that I have changed your thread title.

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    'Thread titles should include all or part of the word/phrase being discussed.'

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